There is that quiet hour
in the midst of the gray
morning sky
As I silently contemplate
the nights end eclipsing
itself by the whisper of
a breath
Dawn now breaks across
a feathered landscape
to reveal a silent
soliloquy for myself
to hear
How effortlessly the warm
sun glides over the
horizon as if to portray
a spectacular formation
for my eyes to behold
The glow and warmth
descends upon my face
gently kissing each cheek
Eyes closed, lips warmed
this joy transcending all
that I am, all that I feel,
threading this very moment
into my fabric forever...
Author notes
w o r k i n g h a r l e y l a d y
I sat one evening contemplating the very reason I had been unable to think of a single word to begin a new poem. I had nothing, zero, for a couple of weeks. Was very bothered by this block and feared my new poetry writing days were all but over. So relaxing with my 5 yr old grandson and chatting, i suddenly became awash with these crystal clear thoughts, beautiful words and the belief that my pen was not dead . I closed my eyes and literally visualized walking this path, at dawn break, by myself. Then the poem just took off. I had either seen or heard the word soliloquy shortly before writing, and i just knew i could write a beautiful poem wrapped around this word.
This was an incredible joy for me to write.
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A contest entry
- Colorful Image Contest by FaintWhispers.
450 points, ended May 30, 2007, 24 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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Obviously with the extraordinary number of trophies this piece has won, you must know that it exudes a profound sense of peace to your readers, made all the better by your Author's notes. It would occur to me that the poems that take the longest in being born are, often, the best ones and most worth waiting for.
The vocabulary is emotional, without overriding the poem, in general, and the imagery is simply stellar.
"Dawn now breaks across
a feathered landscape
to reveal a silent
soliloquy for myself
to hear"
Beautiful. And I will say that although usually, the lack of punctuation would bother me - it does not here. The simple elipsis at the end is enough. Perfect.
Thank you for your entry & good luck in my contest.
- Bean Sidhe -
'The sky turned grey as if a great sickness had over come the afternoon. The air turned steadily cold until it was like ice, moving ment the risk of the ice shattering into thousands of pieces that would splinter and crack our worlds. Just as I got to look at you, through a void of time and space I saw behind you a safe place with ones like me. You crippled without warning, the ice in your heart...'
This is an extract from a story i'm writting, I immediatly thought of it as read your work and I love being able to conect peoples work to things, it just makes me smile to know that we can be so different and yet, as poets we think alike...
Great job here well done and best of luck
Dryad Enya -
There are times when the world changes, just for
a moment. Times when we see everything, including
ourselves, in a different light. When peace and
understanding wraps itself around us.
This is what I see in your poem.
Thank you.
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Thank you for entering I'm only one of the judges so we'll get back to you hahahaha! mel. -
Thank you for your entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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warm and comforting !
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this has a very nice flow about it and overall, a sense of rumination and internal monologue. nice work.
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Beautiful. I love the imagery and flow. There was so much power that was very compelling and really fun to read! I couldn't take my eyes off this stellar piece! Love it! Thanks for entering and good luck!
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Oh wow!
This carried me in peace the way through it... So gentle and touching... An awesome expression of tenderness and love!
Best wishes to you in the contest...
~ James ~
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a soft and smiling piece of poetry here, beauty and warmth touching the spirit and the heart as life dances in the eyes.
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thank you for entering my contest. (:
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You know I love this poem, and I know what it means to you...thank you for entering the contest...good luck.
♥
whisper
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Very nice. Lovely poem here. It's a well written piece of poetry...I enjoyed it muchly!
Thanks for entering my contest, and good luck.
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Lovely write. Congratulations on all the prior trophies. Thank you so much for sharing and entering the contest. Good luck.
♥
whisper
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Thanks for entering!!!!
This was a very beautiful poem. Very well written. Good luck in the contest! ^_^ @>}- -
Nice :)
I like this poem a lot...You've really done a good job with it.
"As I silently contemplate
the nights end eclipsing
itself by the whisper of
a breath"
Were my favorite lines by far. Thanks for entering my contest, and good luck
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This is wonderfully done! I espcially love the imagery you've used. Great work and once again well done! Thank you for entering.
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I love the imagery
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This was a nice piece. It really catches your attention and makes me stop and want to take a deep breath. Very well written.
I see I'm not the only one who thinks so judging by all your trophies!
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i liked this it was very pretty
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I thought this was wonderful, great come back from writers block! I loved your way with words, very descriptive, thank you very much for entering!
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How wonderfully peaceful are your words...I have flet this warmth and walked this path...children sometimes bring us renewal and awareness we often forgot we had.
Your word choice is excellent and the flow is so calm.
Wonderful work you have shared.
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great job on this... yes, children always seem to bring the very best out of people... best of luck in this contest!
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WOW sis,
such a peaceful emotion floods my soul with this pen.I love the imagery and the feel of freshness that concurs my emotional side with every word I read...
A blessing to read this morning
Blessings
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Beautiful work, you can almost see it infront of you. Personally I would use a different word than "sun" in the fifth stanza because you have it in the fourth, but that's just me. Thank you for giving me the chance to read a lovely piece.
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It seems almost absurd to think of such a thing as a moment in terms other than the personal. However, when you talk of the sun, warmth, the landscape, you put into contrast those things that are shared by us all. It caused me to consider the nature of such experience and, for a poem, that's a good thing.
Thanks for entering.
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Great Poem
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Conveys a profound sense of peace.
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Great write and thanks for the entry.
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This is a very nice poem indeed I love the flow of this and will be back to read it again
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GREAT WRITE! KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!!! THANKS FOR ENTERING!!
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wow..this is such a beautiful write...so soothing yet so powerful...hope I also experience that wonderful moment in time...you truly described our world in a very emotional scene...
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Beautiful
Wonderfully penned...It's difficult to have a writer's drought...but oh how energizing it is to have your muse awakened again, lol...Best of luck!! thanks for entering my contest...
^j^Honesty Abounds -
unbound imagery to marvel! urafinalist!
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WOW!!
Very powerful write...
Thanks for entering my contest & best of luck
GloriousGift
Heba -
Nicely Done...
I must say I didn't comment the first time on reading this poem because I needed to think about it and let the meaning soak into my heart before I could fairly comment...
So here I am back to leave my words...I think this is a wonderful creation and I felt your words...Really a wonderful amazing piece of writing...
I wish you only the best of luck in my contest and thank you for entering
Much Love
Tessa -
awsome....
if you could ever capture a moment in time better than this..it would be a new era lol very very good. awsome. no grammar or spelling mistakes that i could find. awsome write
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thanks for the beauty..allow me to dwell on this..best of luck in the contest..judging is ruthless .. peter
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I actually like this a lot! I've read some of your poems before ~ your really quite good. Nice job~ good luck in the contest!
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Nice piece. I'm surprised in your notes that you said the poem took off and yet it took perhaps not too much time less than thirty minutes
. It's very lovely though. Children are the symbolism of so many things (most of which are very positive), it's nice to hear that your grandson can inspire you like that. Thank you for entering and good luck!
~ Wild
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I really liked this poem No wonder it has won a trophy very good visual quality
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Beautiful use of imagery, but I commend you most on your use of vocabulary. Not only was I impressed with the advanced words you used, but the gentle, loving tone they created is also commendable. Thanks for entering, and good luck!
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i love it
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Very beautiful poem. Wonderfully written. Thanks for entering and good luck.
Jeannie
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It is amazing to think that you can live for a millennium and never see the same sunset twice. Beautiful imagery. Thanks for entering.
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Oh the feelings we get from Love & Nature!
A beautiful poem reflecting the bounty of the earth!
Thanks for your entry into my contest & Good Luck!
Tang
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Great job, it was wonderfully written
and I enjoyed reading it.
Thanks for entering.
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