Around the corner
Hidden from view
Reading the paper
Waiting for you
Conveniently everywhere
Yet no where to be seen
Different places--
Same routine
A face in the crowd
That's always there
Glance around nervously
Feeling a constant stare
Sweaty palms
Imaginary shapes
Walk as fast as you can
You'll never escape
On your doorstep
A personal prize
Pictures of you
With burned out eyes
A scream of horror
A call to the police
Sense some one's watching
Feel your heartbeat increase
Paranoia takes over
Fear drives you insane
What once was free
Is now in chains
Afraid to set foot outside
Too scared to sleep even an hour
Don't drop your gaurd
Just sit and cower
Inside your head
No longer your domain
What you used to rule
Now I reign
I.
Control.
You.
Author notes
Option 3
A contest entry
- I Want You to .:.Scare.:. Me!! by DecorusApparatus.
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concise and cool, i liked the flow and the rhyme which seemed to add an insane kind of atmosphere to this peice good job
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Creeeeeeepy!!
I adore this poem. This is what i'm looking for!! -
I love this.
This poem makes me think of watching emeril live and you just want to get up after reading it and yell "Bam."
I really like how it flows.
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Wow, don't really know what to say about this poem other than I enjoyed the read. Another fantastic piece from a talented poet.
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You have officially made me even more paranoid than I was before! I have had a couple of stalker poms in this compeiton but his was by far the most realistic and chilling of them. I loved the rhythm of this poem, sort of mesmerising if spoken aloud. The fact that it ryhmes is fantastic and even better, it rhymes well!!
"On your doorstep
A personal prize
Pictures of you
With burned out eyes"
This made me smile, goodness knows why XD
The last lines tied it together beautifully as well.
Thankyou very much for entering this into my contest!!
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Thank you ^_^ I'm glad enjoyed it (even if it did make you paranoid lol)
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Creepy. Nice flow.
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holy crap...this is good! have you done this before...lol.
incredible piece..im paranoid now and loved the ending
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*chuckles* Thank you. This piece has the effect on almost everyone. I love seeing my work instill those feelings in people. It let's me know that I've done a good job writing it.
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hi.
*from my little sister*
[i]Hello /to/ \you,\ too [/i] -
oh, geez, this one still creeps me out. Freaky. Dark. But beautifully written.
scary, yet awesome, stuff!
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Gave me chills just reading.
Very well written, made me feel as though there's a stalker at my window.
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Thank you very much, It's nice to hear that I can really pull readers into my writing
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Oh wow that was extremely creepy! Made me want to check behind me and look out my window to make sure you weren't there! What on earth inspired you to write this? In fact, don't tell me, just STAY AWAY!
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*chuckles* I'm glad I could pull you into the poem.
~your (sometimes)friendly neighborhood stalker
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Great rythem, great ryhme, scarry as hell, perfect
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Thank you bunches ^.^ Thanks for the applause
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Hey man...!!! you are surely a great poet and I love the amazing write..the imagery is beautiful and strong and is very deep!! it rhymed good too at some places which was the best part..The lyrics make this one of more importance and this one is just amazing.
this is a great job, and i look forward to read more of yours. ANd do take a look at my work too, i wud be very thankful to u for this act of kindness best of luck for more!!!
God bless,
Love,
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Thank you so much for the complements, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I look forward to reading some of your poems as well (which I shall do shortly)
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Wow i really really love this!!! i know what its like i ve been there on both sides,, the staler and the stalkee lol.. but really this was genious,, a great topic for ppl to use. an exellent poem very well writtten, with great energy, flow and imagry,,
keep it up
much love kaydee -
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LOL thanks ^_^ I thought it was a good idea, too, when it came to me. I'm glad other people think so too
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