you took a quiz on the internet
to tell you exactly who you are
the answers came, pouring out, beyond regret
they tried to label your dimming star.
Said, lets call you emo
thats emotional,
you feel, you know
were naming your Soul.
I would call you popular
they look at you, they love you
youre really going far.
((dont you see i love you too?))
Sit in the bleachers and call her Athletic
can you see how hard they fight
your taunts, your sex, your lust is sick
Good people just try to do what is right.
And that is just a prep, that is Just a stoner
Someone walks out of Step. They are a loner
You find me the christian, you find me the jew
you find me the muslim, so radically different from you
open up the books and find me a nerd
why is he reading?
did you let his voice be heard?
its heartbreak and hate your feeding
When they cant just be Alive
and its gotta feel so bad when the names stick
and nomatter how they try
theres no belonging or identity in the clique
Theres a breakdown in the trenches
with the overturned school benches
.:Gunshots:. people were screaming
F-e-a-r R-o-ts, but poets were dreaming
Give Me a world! give me some harmony
oh fuck, just some peace, some live and let be
If i already bleed, if slowly i die
when i wake up and watch the news
Dont make me cry
Im already paying my dues
Ill try so hard, Ill live and be fair
Please woncha try too
Its just gonna suck, if only some care
Decide.. Who are You?
Author notes
brand new. not about that one shooting.. about all this shit.. about what I saw in school.. about what all these people i talk to go through.. if you are over 20 i dont know if you know what its really like nowadays, heck, its 10 times worse in my highschool than it was when i was there 2 years ago, IM almost out of touch, these kids are living and dying and bleeding and trying so fucking hard to make it.. to be themselves, to be Alive.. plain and simply. You sit there and said.. damn druggies.. damn punks.. emo,whore,jock,brain,suckup,dropout,failure,winner.. you dont get it at all. We dont fit into your fucking boxes. I want to be a pastor, yet.. i Cannot be everything some Church wants me to be.. i shouldnt swear, i should be more understanding yes.. but im not gonna conform to have a "nice" image.. that is bullshit. Ive gone through everything i have for a reason and and if im not MYSELF how am i ever gonna teach people by my example?
A contest entry
- The Cries of Society by bloved.
450 points, ended July 11, 2007, 29 entries
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Whacha think?
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hmmmmmmm
This was a lovely piece...this is not actually what I wanted but I can see why you enter in this contest...this has to do with school problems...issue's and confromity
I'm 16 I know what the hell you are going thru...Im biracial...so everyday of life I'm ask to choose a side..black or white..ghetto or emo...or whatever.
I have to say yes i agree with you...the school systrm and social behivors..with school peers have gottom dramically worst in the last few years..so older adults can't reall understand the shit we go through
Thank you for your heart and passion...walking up people to this problem..
I'm glad this wasn't another whinny/emo/depressing poem...because it would of been DQ..because at first glance it seemed like that..but than it got more into depth..more passionate
Thank you for sharing and good luck in my contest
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thank you all so much, you guys are the best. *hugs* i know you get it.. i wish i could make the crappy people understand what they do at least.. even tho they would still do it. you all rock, you all are my best friends. thanks for reading my stuff, you guys are part of the reason i write.
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I already told you how much I love this. It is a manifestation of so much buildup, that so, so many people can relate to. Your first few lines, in my opinion are misleading, (not in a bad way) I felt like it was going in a different direction; and the BAM You hit us. 'dimming star' oh, how I will never forget that visual.
Your right, things are tough nowadays, but if we have people churning our creations like this, if we have the response you have, the depth you feel, Im not too worried.Our generation deals with alot of shit, but I think it makes us strong. I dunno, I feel like Im writing a response poem here.
You know how I feel, your wonderful.
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Like whoah. its amazing how you can put things into words so well. i could totalyy see what you are saying, and this just blew me away. I love this.... bookkmarking...
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I think you're one of the most understanding people I've met. I agree with you - many people forget or don't seem to understand that things in schools and such are only getting worse. Kids are becoming more enclosed in this tiny little box that whatever is different from then, is clearly wrong.
I like the decorative punctuation you gave the piece in "gunshots" and "fear Rots", it gives that section a nice little flair.
This was very easy to read through. I really love the theme you chose, and the way you stuck to it. Excellent!
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Zig Zag
I need time to read your work!
You remind me of me when I was younger, though nothing I did was quite on this level.
You have a wonderful voice, the first lines sent a chill through me, for personal reasons. You have real potentional - start to hit home though, your poetry is a zig zag of emotions, images, feelings and daily references. Some of the amazing ones do get lost, start to hit home - start to target what you feel and what pisses you off.
This is anothe rpiece, similar in style to some of your other work, it is a very distinct style.
Keep writing.
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wow, this is a very good write! i know what your talking about, i may be an old 20year old, but honestly, i agree, the wolrd lately... is just worse..good job amo, keep it up!
Faythfully
Cado
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