If you think you'll damage me,
I will stay flawed for you
What you want is not what's meant to be
I pray that it's not true
I am here, and I'm reminding you
That all your faults are blinding you
Your clouds have silver linings too
Imperfect is confining you
Don't crawl into the dark unknown
And leave me on this earth alone
Destruction will come on full-blown
From faces you have never shown
If you think you'll crack my fragile glass,
I'll shatter just for you
Just talk to me, and time will pass
Tell me what you're going through
Your last breath won't relieve me
I am begging you, believe me,
Destroy me and deceive me,
Just for God's sake,
....please don't leave me
Author notes
May 16, 2007...... This is about my girlfriend... She's gotten pressured by other people to cheat on me, and she beats herself up for it... she takes it to the extreme and she sometimes mensions suicide, which scares the living hell out of me... My heart breaks every single time... I just can't stand it. She may be imperfect, but that doesn't mean I don't love her to death like I always will.
1- Something to make me cry, something sad, like a loss or what not.
5. Make me cry!!! (Aka a really sad poem... i like sad poems and i want to cry)
2. Write about something dark and deep -- pain and grief that you need to rid of
A contest entry
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is really sweet and beautiful...wow...
Stay sick
xx Sin -
This is kinda like me and my boyfriend.
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Very good,"just don't leave me"like that line.Thank you and good luck
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I really like this poem i really enjoy every stanza. thank you for entering my contest i wish u all the best. xXx
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Very good I love the last stanza the most
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sweet
i loved this poem there is no more to that
it was a great wright and you are a really good wright
great wright with love... -
Oh wow, the flow was amazing. Went right along with the story in your poem. I hope everything works out for you and your girlfriend. I'm sorry this is your deepest fear. Great poem though. Thank you so much for your entry and the best of luck to you.
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Gosh!! This is so strong! Esp the last two lines..they brought tears to my eyes..this is very well written and raw..written from heart and thats y i like it!
Thanks for entering and good luck!
hugs n kisses
preets
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ohh i really like this poem it's amazing i like the story behind and i like how you were able to take those feelings and put them into a very good poem luck
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this is a sweet piece. i thank you for entering my contest. my favorite lines are:
If you think you'll crack my fragile glass,
I'll shatter just for you
That's a lot of love and emotion for that girl. good luck to you with her.
Keep up the good work and much luck in the contest!
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Very deep and poignant piece; I thank you so much for sharing this and for being a part of the contest...I wish you and your girl the best of everything
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good stuff
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one word... amazing and wow... (now that i think of it... that's 3 words) good job and thanks for entering my contest... ^-^
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awww, this is really good, and your a sweetheart. i kind of didnt get it until i read about it. nice job.
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this was a great write..very powerful and emotional as well..i really enjoyed reading this and it flowed really well to keep writting your talented and good luck in the contest
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Good!
It has emotion and its twisted jus like what i asked for. and I can see that it really came from the heart..its powerful and moving..good luck! and keep writing. -
Hmm. After reading your notes, it makes me wonder...how people 'love' these days. Cheating, pressure - when true love makes you crave only ONE.
Interesting piece. Thank you for your entry! -
wow
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hmmm...
this doesn't give me inspiration for my movie, but it is a good poem, that was written within my guidelines.. thanks for entering and good luck ^_^
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