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Moved On

Some may call it
Jealousy
Some may call it
Rage...
but every time you talk to
Her
it's like I'm in
Her
Shadow, like I'm something
Of your Past.
Sometimes it's even like
I'm looking through
a thin sheet of
Glass.

I gave you my
Everything...
Was it not enough
to see my love for you
in my eyes
Every Day?
To steal glances
across the room
when no one was
Watching?

Seeing you talk to
Her
Look at
Her,
makes me feel
Minute...
so you can have
Her
and you can have
Every
    Little
            Piece
of my heart you
Stole
with
Fake Words
you didn't mean.
And I'll watch
my entire life slip
into the hands of some other
Girl.

All I wanted was to be
loved.
To feel beautiful.
To feel Wanted.
And now I watch it all
Slip Away.
Slip Away with my
Shattered Hopes.
My Shattered Dreams.

At one time
I thought your dreams
were of
Me.
Of what we had...
Now I wonder
If you ever really
Loved Me...
Or if it was all
Just a
Game.
and now...
You've moved on to
the Next player,
And taken my
Heart,
With you.

Author notes

Option #2.
Contest- The Hurt Inside: Option #1.
Contest- options come one come all: Option #2

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  • cinnamonqueen
    June 15, 2007

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    Strongly Emotive

    This has good rhythm and thers is an offbeat rhyme which really lends to the theme very nicely! Well done! You've conveyed an emotion adeptly!


  • PoetryDove
    June 1, 2007

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    This is so beautiful! I love it, that's all I can say. When I was reading this for the first time I was thinking; dang, this really seams like me! That jealosy, I can't say that I'm not jealous, and I can't say that I'm in rage because of all of this. Your heart is breaking...mine is as well. After time, things fade *such as love sometimes* well at least in this case. You begin to wonder things, like "did he ever love me, or was i just a game to be played until he got bored?" or something like that. We can't help but wonder. You have such a good poem, I can't even describe what I feel while reading this. I just think of HIM and ME...all of that crap Oh jeez lol, so anyway...I loved it a lot, don't change anything about it! It was so good!
    Good luck thanks for entering
    ~Poetrydove~


  • Sunset Dreamer
    May 29, 2007

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    ...

    This is amazing. i can feel my pulse race with rage and hurt because i too know the feel of jealousy.
    Beautiful write.good luck! ♥Kira


  • Dragon Flame
    May 27, 2007

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    great!

    This poem reflects EXACTLY how i feel most of the time, so I know exactly where you are coming from. A wonderful write, with a jaunty layout adding even more to the effect of the poem. very well done... rach xx


  • ExpectingMommy18
    May 25, 2007

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    this was a very good poem and im sure many people can relate to it i thought it was a great write and good luck in the contest


  • AshesFromFire
    May 25, 2007

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    powerful, powerful and emotional! I really liked this one! you did an exilant job! Good luck!
    I just want to tell you everyone feels this way from time to time! There will always be the guy that breaks your heart, but there will also always be the guy that shows you that your heart wasn't broke forever. and ever so gently help you sew it back up!


  • forbidden-colour
    May 24, 2007

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    Sad, Really Sad,
    Every Person Is Beautiful Dollypie.
    You Dont Need Cigarette Breath && Tragic Lies To Believe That,

    Mwahh

    Stay Safe Hun
    x


  • The Hardest Goodbye
    May 23, 2007

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    well done on this piece. i enjoyed it very much very expressive and beautiful. it showed all your true feelings. keep it up

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