Is this really
Real,
or just a fantasy...
A long dream waiting to become
a reality.
I don't want to wake up,
don't want to find out
it's not
Real.
I just want to stay
with you
Forever
trapped inside
our board game
that is
coming to an end...
as soon as I
Wake Up.
Author notes
Option # 5.
Explination: Love is like a fantasy you have. When your dreaming you never want it to end and dreams end only when you "Wake Up". or Realize that it's a dream.
A contest entry
- It Won't Last Long by Shakari.
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Comments
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I take it the Bohemian Rhapsody tribute extends to the rhythm?
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Neat poem, but it makes too much sense to do well in my contest. The authors note also only explained what I already knew. Thanks for entering, though.
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wonderful poem. this is definitely a poem many can relate to in life. good luck in this contest.
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Thank you for your contest submission as well as for following the rules. this sad piece leaves me thinking you have despaired over love, but have hope, it took me until middle age to find the right one and we do indeed have a fantasy love, AWAKE! I know a lady that found hers at the age of 73!!
So ahve hope!
Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. 
Hetohke'e 
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please read rules again. a new rule has been added.
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This piece was splendid. I loved your style and how you spoke about something that is not meant to last. Sure, sometimes we live in a fantasied dream where we would love to stay for a while, but it ends all too soon. I love how you took my contest to that idea. I wouldn't have thought of dream-states in a million years!
Your flow was superb and I loved how you repeated certain phrases to get the message through that you are serious about where you wish to stay. Keep up the great work, good luck in the contest, and thanks for the entry! I look forward to seeing more of your work in the future!
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This is very deep and profound. It holds a lot of metaphors as well. The best of luck to you in the contest.
Kari
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