Oh God
this creation is a deluge
I understand it since long
you recognize I am a small baby and
this rivulet is so copious
however, as one of your sprout
I grasp how to swim in this water
I have detached my shoes too
foregoing a jump into this stream
yet I am halting just to recognize
that how sunken is this torrent?
Oh God...
Author notes
Based on a picture option no...1
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2350698
A contest entry
- Pay it Forward! Picture Inspired by iamlost.
600 points, ended June 5, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Lovely!
How sweet to have the innocence of a child who must plunge into life...remember?
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I like the way you have captured the feeling in this piece, or her just pausing to wonder, and telling me what she is wondering about. An intelligent yet childlike feeling in this, fitting with the picture, thanks for entering!
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'I have detached my shoes too
foregoing a jump into this stream
yet I am halting just to recognize
that how sunken is this torrent'
I detached my shoes, not jumping in the stream...how sunken is this torrent...lovely lines! Good luck in your contest. ~Sie
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Aren't we all small children wading in the deep waters of our life?...You express even the simplest ideas with poetic phrases and make the ordinary... divine...I love this one! Peace, Rhonda
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Very beautiful and inspiring words...You always get a lot out of pictures to give you inspiration...good luck in this contest..smiles, Terry
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