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Paradise {HM}

Paradise is my home
Panoramic my view
Pleasing, the sights and sounds
Peace felt within my heart
Poignant is its beauty
Prolific the gardens
Pruned daily with His care


Joyce Le Lievre
(sunny day)

© Joyce A. Le Lievre, All rights reserved
May 16, 2007

Author notes

Pleiades:

This titled form was invented in 1999 by Craig Tigerman, Sol Magazine's Lead Editor. Only one word is allowed in the title followed by a single seven-line stanza. The first word in each line begins with the same letter as the title. Hortensia Anderson, a popular haiku and tanka poet, added her own requirement of restricting the line length to six syllables.

From: Shadow Poetry.com
http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/pleiades.html

Picture courtesy of the contest, the artwork is that of Jim Warren.

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  • ShelleyA gold member
    May 19, 2007

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    Nice title. Perfect form. Good flow and tone. Lovely depth of feeling. Good word choice. Nice alliteration. Your last two lines sum up your poem very nicely. Your poem suits the picture for which it was written. Thank you for your entry. Shelley


    • sunny day
      May 19, 2007
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      Shelley, Thank you for hosting and the honorable mention which is now sitting atop the mantle on my home page. This was my first attempt at a Pleaides and the artwork you chose was wonderful inspiration. I had been looking to try one of these and I saw your contest. I'm very happy that my words spoke to you about the picture. It did the same for me to bring out the words. Love and God bless you, Joyce


  • Puppydog gold member
    May 18, 2007

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    SIMPLY BEAUTIFUL!

    There is so much beauty around us that we take for granted each and every day. If we only believe in the Lord he will help us to see the beauty that is always before our eyes.


    • sunny day
      May 18, 2007
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      Kevin, It does look like paradise and that is my impression of the picture. It was my first attempt at a pleaides and I'm very happy that you enjoyed this one so much. He will help us to see all beauty as long as we believe. Love and God bless you my dear friend, Joyce


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    May 17, 2007

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    i like this poem and the pic that came with it,i mean that you did a golden job on this my friend, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


    • sunny day
      May 17, 2007
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      Aaron, Thank you for the golden words of praise that you gave to me. Shelley did choose a lovely picture to inspire us for this contest and it was fun to attempt my first pleiades. I'm very happy that you enjoyed it. Love and God bless you my dear friend, Joyce


  • going nowhere
    May 17, 2007
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    very nice, and it described the picture perfectly.


    • sunny day
      May 17, 2007
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      going, Thank you for the applauses and your lovely words of praise. I'm very happy that you enjoyed this piece. It was my first attempt at a pleiades. Love and God bless you my friend, Joyce


  • Amera gold member
    May 16, 2007

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    I knew that was Jim Warren's as soon as I clicked here; he's my favorite artist. You did an amazing job descriping is with a pleades no less! It's hard to paint a good image with this form but you pulled it off perfectly.

    Love,
    Amera


    • sunny day
      May 17, 2007

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      Amera, Thank you for the applauses and your lovely words of praise once again. I haven't seen much of Jim Warren's work, although I will say that this is a beautiful piece. A picture inspired contest it was and these were my thoughts as I felt like I was in paradise. This was my first attempt at a pleiades and I'm very happy that you enjoyed it. Love you my friend, Joyce


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    May 16, 2007

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    Absolutely Enchanting

    A wonderful piece. LOVED this. So ery very well done. ~Pamela


    • sunny day
      May 16, 2007
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      Pam, This was my first attempt at a pleiades and they are interesting. I don't think it would become one of my favorites although it does say a lot with few words. Thank you very much for the applauses and your lovely words of praise you gave to me. They are an inspiration in themselves. Love you my friend, Joyce

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