My razor
To my skin
Is my escape
My pen
To the paper
Is my escape
My headphones
To my ears
Is my escape
My tears
Hitting the flood
Is my escape
My gun
To my head
Is my fianl escape
Author notes
Opition 2 Shinedown- 45
opition 4.. i worked today at mickey d's.
A contest entry
- My first music contest. by James L Williams.
700 points, ended June 5, 2007, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Please tell me what you think
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Nice
Its very short and very to the point. Even though its simple, its very good. Nice song inspiration. -
I like how you've described the different ways in which one escapes from the world, it enhances the dramatic effect of the ending. Thank you for entering my contest.
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Welll.... to be honest, I wasn't a fan of this.... there was just nothing there... it had NO imagery whatsoever... it didn't have much meaning in it... and there was no grammar.... Thank you for entering and good luck in my contest.
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To think i was pratically in dat position once, the short sentences describe what the situation is all about perfectly, nice one!
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Aesomeness
I think that this is exactly what I wanted. This poem is exactly what the song descibes. Great work.
James Williams
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Biting...
Your poem is chilling in it's biting honesty...
The imagery is evoked cleverly and the message clear.
Excellent!
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