Waiting
Upon the bank, alone she sat
by the river, flowing along
with thoughts to keep her company
of memories held so strong
Her toes, she dangled, into the stream
the soothing waters rushing by
every now and then a bird would sing
a sweet, calming lullaby
The warmth of the sun enveloped her
a cool breeze caressed her skin
with a smile upon her gentle face
as her memories stirred within
She knew not how long she lingered here
for time, didn't matter much anymore
apart from her lover, she'd spend the days
dreaming on the river shore
Then she heard a rustle, not far off
turning to see what made the sound
and there he stood, the love of her life
at last, her waiting was now done
Their eyes met, locked in a loving glance
no words spoken, lest they break the spell
he raised his hand up to her face
touching her tender, with a kiss as well
It felt like forever, but she had to wait
she knew she could not go on alone
now together, they soared into the heavens
to spend all eternity, as one
~PennyLynne~
Author notes
Written July 29th, 2003
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Well... now that I've read your explaination....lol. I like that we don't see the comments right after the poem like we used to.. makes commenting more fun and then reading the other comments.
Dee -
A beautiful love story, Penny....has a certain mystique about it.. almost like it's a mirage or something. At first I thought her lover had either left her for some reason or that he had died...but as I read further it gave me the feeling that perhaps she had passed on ..the lines,
'She knew not how long she lingered here
for time, didn't matter much anymore'
gave me the feeling that perhaps it's she who has passed on and is waiting for him?....hmmm... don't mind me.. I'm just guessulating
It's a beautiful poem, though and I enjoyed it very much.
Dee -
wonderful
oh, what a wonderful story! The images were strong and bright and clear, and I could see it playing out in my mind like an old moving picture real. I really can't say anything more because so many have already said so much and to say more would be to sound repetative. Again, this is a wonderful write, and I enjoyed it ever so much!
Amanda
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WHAT??!!! I didn't comment on this!
*hides face in shame* I KNOW I read it before........
"Her toes, she dangled, into the stream
the soothing waters rushing by
every now and then a bird would sing
a sweet, calming lullaby"
Such a peaceful image
Such a beautiful poem....*sigh*.....and no, if you'll excuse me, I have to go sit by a river and dangle my toes in
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Excellent!
Loved this! Sad, Heart-touching story/poem! So beautiful...a pleasure to read!!!
< 3 Maureen
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Tamara, thank you ever so much for your kind words on this piece.. and I'm not sure about love working out like in the movies, but I can see 'this' one happening LOL cos sometimes we don't always get what we want in this life, but have to wait til we're on the other side...you're wonderful comments are always so very much appreciated
Thank you for your kind comment Devil-angel...and I sure hope you don't have to wait much longer for the love of your life
LMM, thank you so very much...I am touched (and yes I am LOL).. your visits and wonderful comments are always so very much appreciated
Here's a tissue Tamara LOL sorry to make you cry, but it is a nice feeling to be able to write a tear jerker!! LOL Your kind words and your kindness are always appreciated
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oh wow, this sang like a song cries it's so beautiful penny. breaktaking. oh gods this one really got to me, I have to go cry now, i'm sorry. this is magnificent hun, stunning
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awwww *sniff* that was beautiful! the end was a little unexpected, pulled at me ole heartstrings...a touching poem! yes to echo what tamara said, you are a blessing for us here
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That is soooo beautiful!!! So lovely, man, I wish the love of my life would come for me!! I miss him soooo much!!! This is a very lovely poem!!! Excellent write!!
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she had to wait, for no words spoken to gaze into the eyes of her one and only
for she had waited oh sooo long....
weep tears of joy and splendor
does love ever work out the way the story books, movies and poetry
plays the excitement?
this is a treasure Penny,
must store this one away in favorite files....
while I muster up my feet soaking in the river of life
wondering and waiting,,,,,
pure joy darlin!
you are a blessing for us here
Tamara -
aww Karen, you always say the sweetest things sorry I haven't been around in a while but hopefully I'll have more time now to spend on AP and catching up...I've got a LOT of catching up to do LOL... thanx always for stopping by, you cheer my world up with your kindness
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Beyond Beautiful*********
Penny
This is incredibly beautiful!!!!!!!!!!!! Your words always create the most lovely images for me to linger in/
Your rhyming is truly amazing
I haven't seen you in a while, I hope things are beautiful in your world
Karen
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ROLFMAO@Kathy...you're gonna have to tell me that story sometime, there seems to be more mystery in that than in my poem LMAO
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Ole' "Meatloaf" apparently wasn't thinking about me when he sang "two out of three ain't bad" 'cause I didn't even get one out of three LOL
The mystery in this piece is what I love about it, one of many reasons I fell "with" a chair once and the nails went into my butt!!! OUCH!!! (a true story, but a little censored LMAO)
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BrokenButterfly...I thank you so much for your kind words and visit...so very much appreciated
Yvonne, great to see you..and I'm doing fine thanx...hope all is well with you..by your poetry, it sounds like you're doing just fine thank you always for stopping by, much appreciated
Timothy, always an honor to see you stopping by, your kindness is forever appreciated!!! Take care
RR, I thank you so very much for your wonderful comment and visit...I know I owe visits, I'll be by as soon as I can... thank you again for your kindness
Damon...hi ya!!! always a pleasure to see you my friend.. your continued visits are so very much appreciated
SunnyLise, I thank you ever so much for your kind words and visit..I'll come by very soon to check out your work...thanx
Blondita, so great to see you again. I haven't forgotten you and your great writing...I will be by soon to try and catch up ok.. thank you for your wonderful comment!!!
Susan, always so nice to see you..your continued visits and kind comments are always appreciated..I WILL be by soon ok, I miss reading your wonderful work!!! BTW, how did you find out I'm yet another year older????? t'is a secret!!! LOL
Kathy, you never fail to make me fall off my chair with laughter LMAO I'm so sorry your lady grew old with only her memories...but I did LOVE that poem of yours and actually, all guess are wrong LOL...she passed first, as depicted in the lines
"She knew not how long she lingered here
for time, didn't matter much anymore"
but could not go on alone, so she sat in a nice secluded spot waiting for his time to come so they could enter Heaven together, hand in hand
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excellent
You know how I feel about this one LOL At least your two lovers met before they headed "upward" LOL My "old lady" went alone and the "memories" melted with her in the snow LOL This is truly beautiful Penny. Very moving and emotional. I love the mystery in wondering if this man was a mirage or if this woman was dying or if the man died and he came back to take her to Heaven with him. My guess is the latter. Wonderful vivid imagery. Overall an exceptional piece
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Oh Penny
I just loved this one hun
It's beautiful
Loved it
Happy Birthday
Do come see me
Love ya
Susan~~~~~
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I havn't had the pleasure for a long while Rubee....
This was lovely...such a serene write and one that conveys
much hope and contentment...perfect rhyme...
Enjoyed.
~ sonia ~
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Greetings,
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Wow, this poem was very touching. The whole poem I was wondering what she was waiting for, I never would have guessed the ending. Wonderful, amazing job, you are very talented. This poem was beautiful in every way. It made me want to cry and smile all at the same time.
"It felt like forever, but she had to wait
she knew she could not go on alone
now together, they soared into the heavens
to spend all eternity, as one"
This is the perfect ending. Wonderful job!!!!
~Lise
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Hi ya Penny? I love this poem and am glad that I stopped by today. You do a wonderful job on almost everything that you write. Really I love almost every thing that you write. See you again soon.
Damon D. Brewer -
Beautiful writing as always,
It's good to visit again.
You weave nature into wonderful poetry.
RR -
Perfect Piece And Flow
Truly an amazing poem, Rubee, I really love the flow!
I couldn't begin to tell you, how much I enjoyed this piece!
Thanks for sharing your sweet soul and God bless you more and more each day!
Read ya again soon!
-Timothy -
this was really beautiful to read.
Yvonne
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That is sooo sweet! At the beginning I could just picture everything you were talking about and could almost feel the sun on my own face! You've used some great imagery! This is such a cute piece!! The ending is adorable as well. They'll finally be together forever and nobody will have to wait anymore!!
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