Look at all the people
Look at all their things
Perfectionist and Drama Queens
Football studs and Emo Kings
Nerds and all those pretty girls
Gangsters with their grills
These are all the things that make the world go round
A life of groups ,clicks ,and cliques
Where everybody tries to fit in
But what about us outcasts
Those ones that are looking in
You can never label us as one thing
But you try to leave us out
So let us make our own society
With are rules and laws for our community
It will be the land of the misfits
For the freaks and the losers and the outcast
For the ones who stand alone
Don’t need to label us as one thing
We’re just a couple of misfits
Author notes
there's nothing wrong with being a misfit
A contest entry
- here's to the losers II by risewiththesmoke.
300 points, ended June 7, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - sadness and darkness and anything society dosent like. by Emo Cowboy14.
1200 points, ended June 8, 2007, 40 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Once you have graduated, you will laugh at just how small that little school community is in the rest of the world.
All that petty b.s. that seems to be so important to all those people means about jackshit in the real world, and misfits realize they are no longer misfits because there are more people like them
But yeah, school segregation sucks!
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You are so right...I am laughing my ass off now because I know that all this petty bs of high school "cliques" is just a stupid phase.
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That's good.
Hlps keep in perspective some form of sanity knowing that that crap doesn't last forever.
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rhythm is sporadic anf doesn't make the piece flow after the second half. Good show of emotion, but lack of imagery as to the setting of the poem. It;s really just talking about their opinion and ideals. It's very creative, love the title, but could use a little bit of work. Thanks for the crit on mine.
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thanks for your honesty and crit. Much needed and much appericated.
yeah the poem was more about opinion but i can see where it needs more imagery will take that considerarion.
Thank again
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I liked this a lot.KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!!
~Tia~
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realy good but i dont see how the title fits in
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thanxs...i choose the title after the christmas moive(hahah yeah lame) rudolph the red nose reindeer...where there was the land for all the forgoted and misfit toys. a place where the toys went where nobody cares for them anymore. sorry if it was confusing but thanks for the comment
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Nice Write. I love it.
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omg. yess i love this one. very good. thanks soooo much for entering. and good luck.
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"So let us make are own society"
are is suppose to be our i believe...
very nice though i like it adn you are right through and trhough..
its society today at its "best"
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Holy Cow :O
Sweet, I love the little Old Childish Touch the title 'Land of Misfit Toys' gave it. Kinda reminds me of sorting through old junk in the closet.
But like that box of assorted manufactured goods, people are too unoriginal and just a duplicate of life.
Then theres the odd toy, you don't know where it came from, who gave it to you, or how it even got IN there. The wings on it may be twisted, the batteries half dead, the sounds a little muffled - but just like the odd people, it's still good. If not BETTER. It is an original.
I Love this!
Brilliant!
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I like it a lot, but the rythem died.
<3 I love it though.
Cool ass ideas.
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thanks
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