The role reversal played out incomplete,
We tried to escape ourselves, but the risk was too much.
We tried to leave our trivial misdealings,
In the room that we slept in,
Overcome by the crushing weight of the world,
We retreated before we could begin.
It sounds like, I might be mistaken,
But it feels like the right choice,
Don't tell me whats right, when,
I can't hear truth in your voice.
I want to bury myself in you,
Let me be forgotten in your embrace,
Let me rest here for eternity,
Don't let me be erased.
My life, it seems, is a caught in a violent storm,
The clouds, violet, indigo, caustic and dire,
Sever my will from my consciousness.
Leave my love and I in an eternal fire.
The antagonist performs well,
and I love him from the start,
Undoubtedly in the end however,
He will break my heart.
Author notes
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Comments
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I really like this poem especially when you said, " Don't tell me what's right, when, I can't hear truth in your voice." Great poem, Keep it up!
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good!
this is such a good poem and i know how you feel.... i've been hurt really badly before... and now its SO hard to love and turst again... i LOVE the two lines.. " i want to bury myself in you, let me be forgotten in your embrace" .... they show so much emotion and its eXACTLY what i want!!!! this is a really good poem and i really like the flow and the rhymes.. those were REALLY good! like they all fit.. the only one that seemed a BIT out there was the... 2nd to last one. i hit that one and was kinda like... uh... what? but other then that its really good and i LOVE the background since paris is the city of love!!!! good poem and defintetly keep wriiting!!!!!!!
Kat
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this is good. 'Don't let be erased.' This line was very good.
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