The waves crashing upon the rocky shore
A princess sits staring at the sea she adores
Her prayer is for Neptune God of the sea
Who is showing his awesome power for all to see
Her voice strong with feeling drifts across the waves
Pleading for him to stop, her kingdom he can save
She looks up the cliffs to the castle above
In her eyes is a look of tender love
The towers standing tall as if on guard
Over the large, open, level yard
Then as if in answer to her prayers the wind stops
The pounding, spraying waves suddenly drop
A serene and gentle calm settles gently over all
The sun appears bright, looking like a big orange ball
The princess begins to smile as she journeys up, over the cliffs
In the sky, puffy white clouds slowly drift
She walks through the gates, sighs a soft sigh
Glad to be home safe, she thanks Neptune as he looks down from up high
Author notes
I don't often write any fantasy but somehow this little story came to me. I do hope those who read like it.
In a list
A contest entry
- Give Me Your Best!!! by Tomorrows Window.
300 points, ended June 2, 2007, 41 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wow... just wow. I,m lost for words, whic is not an easy task. Good luck in all you do. You have a bright future!
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DEAR TOMORROWS WINDOW
Thank you so very much for stopping by and reading my little fantasy poem. I used a picture of a young girl sitting by the sea with a castle up on a cliff as my inspiration.
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This is an amazing fantasy. I love the way you described the setting. Great write! It was perfect. Good luck in the contest!
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DEAR JENERALIX
Thank you so much for this lovely comment. I appreciate it so much.
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This has a wonderful easy flow. One that just draws you in so very gently. After reading the comments I discovered that you said this came to you from a picture. Well, drawing inspiration from a picture is a lot harder than some may think. And for you to go outside of your realm in doing so makes this doubly enchanting. A wonderful and enjoyable read. Thank you so much for sharing your gift.
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DEAR DOLLFACE
Thank you so much for such a lovely comment.
I do not do many fantasy ones, your kind words mean a lot.
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Enchanting!
A mystical and magical write.
A fascinating fantasy written
with creativity and passion.
A delight for all to read
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HELLO DARELL
Thank you so much for such a wonderful comment, I have done many fantasy writes, your kind words mean a lot.
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kevin, your writing is getting so much better. this write is great. thank you for sharing this with me. viyanna rosemarie
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DEAR VIYANNA
Thank you so much for this lovely comment, I have not done many fantasy ones, your thoughtful words mean a lot.
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Outstanding
It is unusual for you to write a fantasy poem and I thought this was well-written and very creative with a fairy- tale theme and feel. The language is poetic and I liked all the imagery of the princess in her castle. You have a great ability to paint pictures with words. A stunning poem, brilliant to read.
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DEAR BETH
Thank you so very much for reading my first fantasy poem, I saw a picture of a young girl standing on cliffs overlooking a storm tossed sea with her castle sitting high on the cliffs behind her. These words came to me.
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Wow that was a grat poem!keep up the good work and yoyu may become a good author
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DEAR CUTECARLI6
Thank you so very much for reading my little story, I saw a picture of a young girl sitting on cliffs high above the sea with a castle in the background. I let my imagination take me there
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So simple and sweet, a rich change from deep poetry were you have to ponder on what you have read. I think that this would fit well into a child's book of poems. Well done. Val
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DEAR ELFIN
Thank you so much for reading my attempt at fantasy poetry. I believe in simple message in simple form, your kind and thoughtful words mean a lot.
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Very nice, very beautiful and interesting story. I like this type of poems very enjoyable. keep it up, you're good at this type of poems as I see. =)
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MY DEAR SIR
I sincerely thank you for taking the time to read my fantasty write I usually do not write with fantasy but lately I have been letting my dreams come out in my poems, I appreciate your kind words so much.
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What a beautiful poem, a fantasy and for one who doesn't normally write this kind of poem, you show promise. Definately try writing more of this kind of poem, it took me on a journey with the Princess.
Well done.
Your friend
Sue xx 
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DEAR SUE
I saw this picture of a little girl sitting by the cliffs by the sea in a contest a while back, I can never seem to sit and think of what to write when the contest is open, the other day I had this image in my mind and this little story came to me. I thank you so much for stopping by and reading my little story.
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'Castle By The Sea'.....
brings a picture in my mind of a dream I had awhile back...
one night of standing on a hill....
then I fell....
then someone caught me....
and then I flew...
but yet not I...
just my spirit...
anyways; sorry for wondering off from the write...
it was a lovely read...
if it takes me to something like it just did...
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DEAR ROSE FOR YOUR HAIR
I thank you so much for this lovely comment I am glad that this could bring back to you some happy thoughts.
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Nice poetic painting upon your poetic site, nice used descriptions and feelings. Thank you for leading us to your journey to this nice mystic and majestic place. Great write.
~Sonja~
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DEAR SONJA
Thank you so much for stopping by and reading my first fantasy poem/story. I think I am going to start letting my mind wander to those dreams from long ago where my imagination always took me. I had plenty of far out dreams when I was little.
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Outstanding
Kevin, You have done it again
I love this new poem you have written. Now this is a definate must for you to include in a childrens collection. I think this is the first fantasy piece I have ever seen from you but it truely is one of your best writes. The whole poem fits so well together, the layout is great and the rhyming is not forced at all. One tiny spelling mistake, no e on the end of kingdom It in no way detracts from the poem though.
All up, I give this two thumbs up and a great big smile
I'd love to see more fantasy poems, I hope you will be adding this one to your childrens writes.
Sapphire
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DEAR SAPPHIRE
Thank you from the bottom of my heart for such a lovely comment. I saw a contest a while back with a picture of a young girl sitting by the sea with a castle in the background up on a cliff. I can never seem to sit down and write about a picture when the contest is going on, but later something always comes to me when I least expect it to. I am so happy that so many like this one. I am going to try to let my imagination run free and write more like this.
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How beautiful Kevin! I think you should write more fantasy. Oh I could picture her and the waves and her castle, great visuals you give the reader. I wanted more! Would indeed make a wonderful childrens book! Well done my friend, hugs, Kelly
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DEAR KELLY
Thank you so very much for this wonderful comment I have often thought of writing a story with much the same theme as this one, maybe one day it will happen.
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Precious!!
Oh This is one Precious piece my Friend
Love the images and the storyline You brought forth!
Wow~ You should do these type of writes more often...
Loved it!!
Many blessings to You!
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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DEAR DESIRE
I appreciate your kind and thoughtful words so very much my friend. I think I will be going to more of this very soon. I hope to maybe end up writing a complete story.
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You say you don't normally write fantasy and the truth is that I don't normally like fantasy poems but what you've written here has truly made me smile. Maybe it's because the fantasy seems so minor in front of the innocence and the purity of the love that the princess has for her kingdom.
This is a poem that would please anyone including a child.
It's simple and beautiful in it's structure and meaning.
Lovely.
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DEAR GENTLE BREEZE
Thank you so very much for stopping by and reading my little short story, maybe one day I will expand on this type and write some stories.
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