Technicolour musing
Scarlet, indigo, and cream,
Fusion of kaleidoscope
A rainbow striped daydream
Softly sway like pendulums
In the gentle summer breeze
Vivid hues harmonious
Hypnotize with tranquil ease
Scent of heavenly fragrances,
A sugared spice perfume,
Splashed tattoo on natures canvas
Spectrum reflection in bloom
I merely want to sit and smile
Within this sweet mirage
As this mystical blanket envelops my soul
I belong to nature's montage
Author notes
written with xXsarahstarXx, i did the first verse, her the second, then we did the last two togther:-) hope you like it
A contest entry
- Flower Contest Picture Inspired by Kari.
450 points, ended May 16, 2007, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Yes ...
I can see why you'd like Desiderata.
This is a very good job on this one. The first stanza is almost haikuish, and it is exquisite indeed.
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POETRY E - MOTION
The title is so perfect for this piece. The poem itself is so steeped in enjoyable images that entertain the mind. Im really blown away by this one. Like a good hit of acid! Every stanza is rich with articulate and intellectual phrasing. Each paragraph is like a fine pipe tobacco or robust fine wine. you blew me away with this one Lassie.Your writing has not only proven to transport, but now I truly see how prolific you are.You are not in the writing game, you are in the transportation game. LOL
BLESSINGS ALWAYS,
LOWELL POE -
Wonderfully visualized.
Luv,
Candy
Contest Holder
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Wow, I loved the rhymes you had for this! They seemed so effortless and not all that common, wonderufl to say the least. The imagery was perfectly vivid without adding too much unneeded detail, wellll worth the read! ^-^
GREAT job
Diggin it majorly
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This piece has amazing imagery and use of wording. You've done an excellent job with this piece and I wish you luck in the contest.
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Wow what a beautiful and peaceful write. I felt so at peace while reading. Wonderful imagery
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Hm
This is very vivid & sweet it's not very decorative or awestriking it is more calm, cool, gentle & very collected. It's as if you sat down in a moment of boredom & starting spilling out one beautiful line after another.
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BEAUTIFUL EXPRESSION!
Ah, to get lost in natures beauty!
What more could one wish for.
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Transcend All
Groovy Writing! Thanks for sharing your visions and words!
As this mystical blanket envelops my soul
I belong to nature's montage...........You brought it home so nicely!
Namaste'
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Certainly a great interpretation of the picture - all those colours and you have portrayed that well in these lines. Collaborations bring out the best in poets - as in this write. Nice gold to go with it too!
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I like rainbow striped day dream too! Very nice write. I appreciate you entering my contest.
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I really like this poem! ^_^ Nicely done! VERY creative!
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I Love this poem!!!! It moves me!!! LOL Congratulations on winning gold!! Keep up the good work and feel free to check out my page anytime!!
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I think you both did a wonderful job together in creating this beautiful poem. Well done on winning Gold.
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i love it...
...when poets play around with words.
nice diction.
and i noticed the alliteration in stanza 1 :]
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I liked this very much it has all the makings of the title with flow and flair
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you are a very good writer for 14
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Quite impressive my friend... a little more emotion could be painted in but I think you are getting better and I have always said you have the ability to improve- keep proving me right. ! Awesome job
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Your writing is so beautiful! It depicts a scene that many poets would shy away from, for the delicacy of your words are not of the norm. It is normal for poets to write of despair and anguish, so I am glad that you have broken the barrier and written such a piece. Your flow is smooth, your detail is flawless, and I cannot believe that you are only fourteen, yet write so well. I look at your writing with hunger...seemingly a sense of jealousy, but also, in a sense of admiration. Keep up the great work, thanks for sharing, and congratulations on your well-deserved gold!
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Gorgeous!!
Oh This is one Gorgeous piece You both have created!
How did I miss this I tell You
Love the images and the feel of Your words~
Congratulations on Your trophy win too
Beautifully done!!
Many blessings to You both!
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Your imagery is quite vivid and this was certainly deserving of the Gold! Excellent job on this collab with xXsarahstarXx, you should both be quite proud of this penning! Keep up the awesome work! ~Tia
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yay!!!!!!!!!!!!!! im so happy!
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Absolutely beautiful! Great rhyme and images. Must admit I like the 2nd stanza better than the 1st though lol! [nah both of you did great ] Congrats on the trophy!
lotsa love
~:|Poettrical|:~
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It has a few problems that I am not going to point out because for the great part- it is excellent. You did a wonderful job here. This has got to be one of your best and I am giving my first 3 applause!
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VERY BEAUTIFUL!
This is so lovely, your words paint a very beautiful picture in my mind.
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This was very pretty. I loved it. I think that you have done a wonderful collab and I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Kari
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