it’s listless information
the way I’m feeling
surrounded by this comfortless knowledge
that I can’t be fixed
i feel defeated
like I lost some battle
along the way
& lost it all
i don’t think I have a purpose
& I don’t think god’ll be there
to save me or anyone else
in the end
& all these tricks people keep playing
useless words intended to comfort
don’t mean anything
when I know you don’t care
Author notes
option #10
A contest entry
- Awaken my Mind by Silent Cougar.
950 points, ended May 28, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - [ you've got it b a d ] by Dancing Marionette.
525 points, ended August 14, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
comments please!
Comments
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this is awesome!
it reminds me of my favorite band's first single, "Get It"... you should check it out on their myspace (myspace.com/Deepfield) & let me know what you think.
Anyyyyyway, I think this piece rocks (obviously) & you clearly have a lot of talent as a writer. -
this is really good, there is a really a strong amount of emotion in this, perfect for the option that you chose. thanks for entering and good luck to you
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Hey, I feel it is time for someone else to be woken? I see the sense behind this piece, and although a touch sad, it makes me wonder where it came from.. Yes, many words are sent to fellow poets in recognition of thier writes, and many are sent without true meaning or feeling. This makes me sad beyond belief, and I hope that within the words that I send to you now, you will feel true appreciation and an honest comment is my only intention. I see where this came from, and it can be taken as a wake up call to some who understand the truth behind it, only if they really look at it. keep your chin up and keep smiling.
And Thank you for taking the time to write something that will help wake others minds too.
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this is really good.
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