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The fly on the wall.


it's like a soulful sport to
feed the forgotten double face
you hide so deeply

your walls regret being built
but it's not their fault what happened
your white smile is irresistible
it's not that she couldn't resist
but she wanted someone who'd share
their mind with her, and gain knowledge
I guess she never expected trusting
a long forgotten mastermind, artistic

I'm to emotionally unstable to cry
but I can luckily regret your actions
since you only get correction from them

I watched as you tore her heart to piecer
limb by limb, emotion by emotion; dying
I tried to avert my eyes, but it was far to
interesting, I understood your actions
just by watching it, I never knew the passion
that was behind your work, I was relieved
there was nothing wrong with my pleasure
and yet there was nothing right about your doings

I tried to fly around just to revive her
she never liked me watching you
but I guess she can't argue

 

with the fly on the wall. 

Author notes

''everything I had is gone''
I've read the rules and the poem The Kill

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  • CassidyEngle
    June 21, 2007
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    Pretty Good


  • AshesFromFire
    June 15, 2007

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    Nice. It's hard to watch the one you love, love someone else, espicaly when that love is causing them pain! Great job!!!!! Good luck!


  • AshesFromFire
    June 15, 2007
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    I'll leave a comment when you put what I asked for in the author box.


  • DarkHunter
    May 16, 2007

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    Dark and disturbing piece of poetry. I can't say I like it very much but thank you for entering. James.

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