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Loss of Spiritual Sovereignty

A muffled thought, seemingly abstruse

has  pierced my complacency

and coiled like a noose

around illusions of spiritual sovereignty.

Revolts and revolutions diffuse;

I'm not a hermit; I just prefer recluse.


 Profoundness diminishes to a thread- 

an unquestioned worn-out word

of wisdom, with an unattested fountainhead.

My own set of laws, inconceivable,

it's best, philosophies are lived unsaid.
Don't be wise- live life to earn your daily bread.

 

Kill the revolution, devour its source.

Smother the spirit that starves inside

and every evolution it may endorse;

euthanize it with your loving hands

or watch it succumb to brutal force.

Union of voice and idea must lead to divorce.

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  • Viyanna Rosemarie 2
    May 28, 2007
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    thank you so much for this wonderful entry into my contest to uplift my spirits. i wish you the best of luck. viyanna rosemarie

  • Viyanna Rosemarie 2
    May 28, 2007

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    thank you so much for this wonderful entry into my contest to uplift my spirits. i wish you the best of luck. viyanna rosemarie

  • Mercury Rising
    May 27, 2007

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    Quite a daring and adventurous verse in the dangerous land of poetry where the complacent and comfortable numb fear to tread. Best of luck in the contest.

    David Michaels


  • Aesthete
    May 26, 2007

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    I just thought I'd check out some of the other poets from this contest and wow, i mean really. Do i even have a chance haha. It doesn't matter, this was amazing and thats all I want to see. Very good work sir.


  • Tangled Angle
    May 25, 2007

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    Hmm, the concept is fantastic and your ideas were brilliant, but the overall flow to me just didn't work, and seemed a bit off and awkward. I did like this though.


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    May 22, 2007

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    Well said. As poets I believe we do think differently than others. More open to diverse ideas. Thanks for this entry and good luck.

    Jeannie


  • IAmAlreadyGone
    May 18, 2007

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    one of ur best.. i don't even know why it appealed to me but it did.. first time i read it, itself. way to go p.s.check ur email.


  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    May 16, 2007

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    whoa.... who turned the lights on,, yeech,, is that sun bright or what...?

    This IS the sound of alarm bells ringing...

    Thank you.


  • Frodofan silver member
    May 16, 2007

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    Nice to see some rhyme from you. The topic was relevant to me. I think I've seen better flow from you. It seemed just a little rough here and there.

    Overall, I really like it though. Good luck in the contest!


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    May 16, 2007

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    There is much wisdom held in these fine rhymed lines that should teach people a thing or two. I enjoyed the read, thank you for sharing. La x


    • Raazi
      May 16, 2007
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      Thanks Laura. This is a tribute to every person who has dared to think differently...to every poet.

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