Spend a day
being yellow,
lemony
Like the potentilla,
the daylily;
be the goldenrod
of good fortune.
Feel free to warble,
sing like a meadowlark
atop a fence post.
Flitter
like a sulfur butterfly
in a clover field.
In a list
A contest entry
- Awaken my Mind by Silent Cougar.
950 points, ended May 28, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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beautiful
so beautiful poem
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Thank you for reading the poems. I'm so pleased that you enjoyed them.
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A STUNNING PIECE ALLAMANDA, with such a meaningful message... soothing warm imagery. Much to ponder in this fine expression of poetry.Well done allamanda... thankyou for sharing.
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I think this was really pretty. Pretty is the word that springs to mind. And very soulful. I like the butterfly idea. This poem has a very sing-song flow to it. I like it!
~*CarpeDiemSurrealus*~ -
I liked this a lot..the flow was good. I was just wondering if there was someway you could replace the two being's...EX :
Spend a day
being yellow,
being lemony
= Being Yellow, and
Lemony
??? Though if you do change it might take away from the poem.
Anyway, great job and the best of luck in the contest!
Kari -
Very nice! I like it a lot!
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