Let them take you
For Your Money
For Your Heart
Even For
The Body Part
Let them have
The Lions Share
Of All
And Hide
What's Left
In Iridescent dreams
and milk-white
Memories
Of who we are
And what could be.
A contest entry
- Anything & Everything for GOLD!! by Hebz.
400 points, ended June 21, 2009, 214 entries
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Very beautiful one
Thnx for entering & Best of Luck
GloriousGift
Hebz -
simplicity, yet somewhere in the midst, I feel apathy...from you, the writer....as if you were tired of being blue in the face...
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This was very nice. The simplicity and pogent descriptions were quite refreshing. My favourite part was the beginning few lines.
Thanks for sharing.
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Very simple but compelling. I really enjoyed reading this. It covers a broad dark topic in an almost subtle way, that still manages to deliver the same effect.
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i liked it
great use of words and imagery
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Wow, this is awesome. I really liked the beginning, but the end was my favorite. Beautiful words.
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this is actually a simple yet meaningful poem. this is great comparing the obstacles in life by remembering them. good one!
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wwonderful. I really really liked this poem and even the form that you written this in, and they way you described som thing was just great "milk white memories". great write
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i liked it a lot the little rhyme scheme you have in the beginning fits in really well. the imagery with the "iredescent dreams and milk white memories" was great. It was just short enough to be really nice, and just long enough to be worth reading very good
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I like this. It has a nice flow. My favourite part would be the last stanza, it has hope to it, while at the same time it mentions memories and the present.
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