Death is a blessing and life is a curse
Love is the poison to make it better or worse
I was an innocent lost in this world
Now all that’s left is the shadow of that girl
You came to me and I was barely alive
With the sun I just could not rise
No one was around and no one cared
So I let the darkness consume me there
I’m drowning in loneliness come set me free
After so long in the dark you’re what I need
Ivy is growing around trapping my soul
So I need you to go here and let my soul go
Blood is my water for I cannot drink wine
The night is growing so only the starts shine
Come to me sweet saviour you must
Before all that’s left of me is memories and dust
I will forgive all the sins I have hidden away
If you can forgive me and bring back my day
I do not pretend to understand this life
I just want to live it without constant night
I’m drowning in loneliness come set me free
After so long in the dark you’re what I need
Ivy is growing around trapping my soul
So I need you to go here and let my soul go
Loneliness is what kills us at the end
But you can come here and me you can mend
Loneliness scares me so I turn to a ghost
Even though you are what I need the most
I’m drowning in loneliness come set me free
After so long in the dark you’re what I need
Ivy is growing around trapping my soul
So I need you to go here and let my soul go
I’m drowning in loneliness come set me free
I telling you begging you your all I need
So cut away the ivy to let my soul go
Teach me more for loneliness is all I know
A contest entry
- biggest contest in allpoetry history! (i hope) need 1,000 entries!! by Gasp.
1300 points, ended July 11, 2007, 638 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - lowercase loneliness by drunk in traditions.
300 points, ended August 8, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Lonliness of the Human Heart by angel alone.
525 points, ended September 1, 2007, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Things we lost in the fire... by Jai Guru Deva.
500 points, ended January 26, 2008, 85 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Solitude by second-born.
500 points, ended December 4, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - JUST TWO DAYS TO REACH 1000 ENTRIES !!!! ( BE A PART OF THIS RECORD BREAKING CONTEST ) by Alex Hex.
300 points, ended May 1, 2008, 526 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is such a lonely write…pleading your lover to come back to share intimate moments again…thank you for sharing your lovely poem…
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I like it, a lot, but you didn't follow my contest rules. let me know when you put what i asked of you in the author's notes and I will judge this officially.
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very lyrical. I like the repetition, and the way you use vivid imagery to convey your message and tone. Good luck and thanks for joining the contest.
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it has to be in lowercase
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This is wonderfully written. The overwhelming sense of loneliness is so clearly felt. The rhyme and flow are wonderful. The poem is nicely written. Good luck in the contest.
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wow, great imagery!! i love the first two lines and the "ivy around my soul" image. good luck!!
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i really like this, it flows well and i just like all dark poetry. great job! thx for entering!
~!~keep writing~!~
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This is quite a moving piece of poetry... clearly expresses your hurts... dissapointments in love.
The longing you express is powerfull deep.
A sad... moving piece of poetry, one too which i can relate alot. Well done and keep writing.
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Lovely
Really good. I can feel her loneliness and how she is in the darkness and can't escape. -
engaging
It never fails to pain me no matter how often I read such poetry, for I write it myself and still it cuts into my heart. We are so often severed from our true selves as a child, eternally searching to find that which we are. I related very strongly with this, well done.
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