Hate Me, Destroy Me by pozo at All poetry

Don't pretend to like me

As you try to stop my thoughts,
Don't pretend you care

When I can see you don't.

Don't whisper words of thank you

When people try to break you down

Because I'm standing right here listening

And I know what they do wrong.

Don't pretend it's simple

When we all know it's not

Don't pretend you like yourselves

When we all know the truth.

Just listen to the echoes

Of the lies you told before-

And listen how they turned wrong:

I'm wondering how long

It will take until you're found out

Trying to find genius-

Maybe we should all just rise up,

And stop your empty plans.

We should battle you over lying,

We should battle your pressure,

We should find something in ourselves

The genius of answer.

Author notes

Is the comma ok? I know it's not in the title provided but I felt it was necessary for my poem.

A contest entry

+I'm a question to the World, Not an answer to be heard+ by Forgot2Breathe. 300 points, ended June 1, 2007, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

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Naridill
May 18, 2007

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I like this, and I feel I dont need an explanation why cause I think you know its friggin awesome!! So brutally honest and has a powerful smack in the head when reading it.
Nicely done!
Blondita
May 17, 2007

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I'm not sure who the 'you' happens to be in this? Could be directed towards society at large and the perilous/ruinous behaviour of man, a sub cultural group of losers (ya know, politicians, people who watch big brother bla bla ...or a specific person.

Regardless, it's seething, defiant, openly challenging and rebellious. I like 'angry' when channelled correctly, it shows you care. And not enough people do. It's almost a siren, a warning of sorts. Those two final lines were fabulous in context.

Dissention always gets a gold star from me! I relate to people who care.

Sonia X
Forgot2Breathe
May 16, 2007
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this is beautifdul and overly amazing. wow
Good Luck(though I dont think you'll need it)
sar143
May 16, 2007
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Wonderful
I like this poem alot. It's beautiful and true and flows so right!
Sarah
smiley
May 16, 2007

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Awesome
this was an awesome piece.. the best stanza for me was: Just listen to the echoes

Of the lies you told before-

And listen how they turned wrong:

I'm wondering how long

Yvonne
HaleyMary
May 16, 2007

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Interesting write. This makes me think of society and how people tend to go along with the crowd instead of thinking for themselves. Thought provoking write. Good luck in the contest.
DeLiShDaNcEr
May 16, 2007

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This is a very planed, and thought poem. It felt like you had to make a bunch oc changes to it before you put it in a contest. honestly this was a very out thought poem. Good Job!