Emotions take control of our lives everyday
Unpredictable variations of human behaviour
Lead many to become victims of deception,
Manipulated to spread the word of liars
Living in a world where victory for them is in reality a defeat
Where twisting words to control the masses is common practice
And honesty is just a myth from long ago
What would they do without their narrow minded
Views on life
That creates an illusional world outside of our own
Living a perpetual fear,
Of things that were created within the mind
A wasted life
In the scheme of things
In time we’ll see who lasts
In time you will disappear
For now you are high on yourself
Soon you’ll be
Drowning in your dreams of misguided perceptions
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- Stream Of Consciousness by polly filla.
525 points, ended May 18, 2007, 13 entries
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Absolutely Fantastic
I truly agree with your basic premise. You expressed your self quite well in this write. Thanks for confirming thoughts and ideas that many of us share with you. -
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one thing...the title, 'Unpredictable Variations Of Human Behaviour'. After reading, I would have called it 'Predictable Variations Of Human Behaviour'
Lying, decieving and living in perpetual fear is predictable, you've just described it -
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true, i can see your point, i think i am going to change the name of the poem.
and thank you for your contructive critism
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wow. reminds me of solipsism...'illusional worlds', 'created within the mind'. Quite depressing, and quite real. The 'honesty is a myth' is very hard hitting, yet subtly worded.
Good rhythm as well, and I enjoyed the repetition of 'in time'. Very good, thanks for entering your stream of conciousness -
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what i believe is kind of like solipism, but more of, the world is what you make of it, for example, if one person hates chocolate another person may love it, it's the same thing, just perceived in different ways
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that's just different tastes. solipsism is when the person believes everything is just a part of their life-dream
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oooh, okay, thank you for correcting me
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Excellant/intriguing
A most unique write; very well expressed.
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thank you for your feed back
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You're welcome.
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