today, I can't hear
my heart-beat;
the sound of pain
has vanished
in to an unknown universe.
today, I don't see
a face
in the moon.
the wind doesn't whisper,
memories don't cry.
the picture of a smile
is no more visible
with closed eyes
but even the world
of open eyes
has dimmed in to a droplet
of rain -
seen, and yet unseen.
tell me...
if you have taken
a piece of my soul
and run far away,
leaving a vacuum
in the middle
of my heart?
or is it now
that I am finally
letting you go
and the growing vacuum
is just memories
evaporating?
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May 15, 2007
Please tell me what you think
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beautiful, sad but beatiful
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ah, i wish that memories could just evaporate!!! great poem.
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Sad thoughts...
I believe that it'll always hurt, one way or other. Evaporating memories or an empty spot in the heart, will always be feelings replacing love, and that is a painful experience which takes time to fade.
Not seeing a face in the moon, can't think of a more sad imagery.
Need a hug? sending you one just in case
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It's a beautiful poem which expresses that very essence of what I call "after-love," Sau. It's to sense this poem is not only personal to you, but it also touched a personal spot for me and undoubtedly so many others.
Lovely writing!
Jo
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Love ya
Beautiful poem..
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The images you have created speak with sadness and pain to me, though they are at the same way very beautiful. This is a very emotional and poetical poem!!
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One of my friends mourned the loss of her grief; it had been her companion for several years. You seem to describe such an experience. I love the image of the faceless moon, it speaks of the dimming of painful memory. This is a very relatable poem.
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WOW
What great imagery and I like that this poem is suggestive leaving you to your imagination as you take us on a journey of forgotten and easing pain.
Thankyou for read !
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