Chiming gently on the breeze
The bells of summer play,
While the shadows cast upon my floor
Are dancing as they may~
With crystal clear precision
The rainbows move across my wall,
These bursts of captured sunlight
Are dancing, one and all~
Yet the life upon the street below
Continues unawares
Of this dancing crystal paradise
In the house atop the stairs~
So the birds upon the rooftop
Are my only witness
As I languish on the bed
To absorb this state of bliss~
While the chiming bells of summer
Play so softly on the breeze
I would give the riches of the world
For moments such as these~
Author notes
Written July 28th, 2003
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nice flow and interesting topic.I have windchimes outside on my porch so the sea breeze can make them play for me.Meditating to them is heaven on earth and food for my soul.Blessed be
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I'm ready to take a nap, this poem is that relaxing. Great imagery expressed in this poem. You've got wonderful talent. Thanks for sharing it with us all.
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Susan - this is a subject close to my heart. I love windchimes and suncatchers, crystals, dreamcatchers all sorts of wonderful 'mobiles' that catch the suns rays and my imagination.
I could see me languishing there too as I often do watchint the prisms in the crystals. I really love this poem it, peaceful and serene, quite beautiful.
~Von~ -
perfection
I love wind chimes and rainbows...such surreal beauty in both...beauty that is felt and captured within the soul of their audience...this is perfection, honestly...it really gives the reader a feeling of peace, something I really needed today...bravo...huge hugs, Rowan -
During my reading of this poem, I even heard your wind chimes--very reminiscent of the 'good old' lazy summer days when there was little to be concerned about except resting and a cool glass of lemonade. Ah, memories... I can reconjure many of those events of my childhood, and this piece has been rendered so beautifully, I don't even know what to say to express how much I like it. It's one of my new favorites.
Many blessings,
Raven Aurora -
words do seldom convey the emotionality of sound - but this is soo beautiful and sweet - just like lazy summer afternoons. the words fall into my mind carrying anb image of those ice cream days of my youth with friend Tanya.
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A beautifully penned reflection on the treasured moments in our lives. Thanks so much for sharing. I thoroughly enjoyed this read. Irene
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There's always something magical about windchimes, like a connection to the spirit world maybe...a beautiful, calming piece Susan. Sometimes we do need those moments of solitude to just listen to the sounds around us, a bird singing, chimes dancing in the breeze...a lovely, soothing write, beautifully expressed!!
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I would gives the riches of the world
For moments such as these
The last line really give the poem great purpose, brings so much into the simple pleaure of the sound of a chime in a late afternoon breeze.
Visually very interesting...Very nice writing...
*rose*
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Amazing
What a ridiculously good poem. I wonder how you write like that! And how did you get all those comments! I only have one! :-( -
Oh, now this is just lovely! I have about 20 windchimes hanging all around outside my house, so I can just picture and feel this so well! Your imagery is excellent, a wonderful poem! I see from
glancing at some of your other writes that I am going to HAVE to come back and spend some time here! Can't believe I've missed you all this time! Thank you for leaving a comment on my poem, I appreciate you taking the time and am glad that you liked it! -
What a pretty ending~~ what a nice feeling this gave me Susan
Ya know me thinks you see the beauty in everything I swear you must because you weave such beauty
Loved this Susan
~~Dawn
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I love windchimes, I love this poem, and I love you too.
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It's perfect, so peaceful a moment caught
in time. I see it all so vividly. Lovely.
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One of the most beatiful sounds in the world, next to uninhibited laughter of a child, is the sweet tinkling of wind chimes! I adore the sound, the feel and the reflection of them as they do their lyrical dance.
Wonderful sweet write.. I loved it!
thanks for sharing..
Hugs..
Mary ann -
I really liked this susan, sorry I didn't read it last night, i was not in the mood to read anything, but now that i have read it it's absolutely beautiful it has really nice rhyming that flows really naturally and a very nice picture painted in my head from reading this, it sounds so relaxing and beautiful to hear the wind chimes I love it and I loved the last part when you said:
"While the chiming bells of summer
Play so softly on the breeze
I would give the riches of the world
For moments such as these~"
it's a really nice thought very pretty poem susan 
kayla* -
9.5/10
Errors
None that seem apparent to me.
Overview
This has beautiful rhythm to it.
Opinion
A great piece that you have written here.
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I think you did an incredibly wonderful job in writing this poem. Great! Just great! It was very beautifully written... you've captured such a beautiful imagery...I love the sound of wind chines... thanx for sharing...
mina -
A Thousand Stars*************
Susan
Oh, this is Incredibly Beautiful!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I do love wind chimes
Gorgeous images created within your lovely words
This flowed beautifully, and rhymed perfectly
Love you,
Karen
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super excellent+
This flowed like liquid ...every single word , and I could really envision the entire scene , I too savor times like the one you described. Have some prisms in my window , and love watching the sun cast rainbows around the room , as the wind blows the curtains with a light breeze and I can hear the faint tinkling of the chimes
Susan , I hope you are doing well and hanging in there ......keep smiling and writing <-----that part definitely is a great source to deal with all kinds of things....the beauty and the ugliness
Reenie -
This one flowed extremely nice, the picture isnt all that great but the flow of the poem surpasses it all. I felt like i was there with you on a summer morning watching the prisms dance on the wall as the breeze blew the chimes around. Wonderful Susan, just wonderful.
Lynn -
I love wind chimes! Your poem was a pleasure to read. Very nicely done!
< 3 Maureen
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This is just lovely. Nice write.
~Amanda -
very nice work here susan, i could hear the bells of summer, the windchimes, ringing in the glorius days of summer...
live can be precious, when we remember the simple things of life, sitting on the porch, watching a gentle summer rain...
watching the birds playing in the trees, the bees readying for winter...
wow hun, this is great!
blessed be
mike -
Wow, Susan!!! This poem really does flow nicely, I always enjoy reading your works, every time I visit, I'm glad I did!!! ~Smiles~
Another lovely piece, thanks for sharing!
-Timothy -
I'm with you, blush. These are the moments that make life precious. I like the way you set it up with the beauty of the chimes right above a world unaware just below...a very nice contract and excellent writing
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I love wind chimes. A beautiful piece. I love this stanza especially...
"While the chiming bells of summer
Play so softly on the breeze
I would give the riches of the world
For moments such as these~"
Nice work, Susan
~Kathy -
I love windchimes..i have many spread around my woods...
and I LOVE this write..i could feel every word... i live it pretty much!
Beautiful write..i'm not surprised..i knew it would be
love ya much
~Pamela
storms that passed are messin' with my connection..darn it! lol
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Oh so beautiful.The sounds and picture I can see and hear so clearly..........Amazing! I could never acomplish bringing something so serene to life as you have with mere words of beauty.
Great Write!
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this was a lovely piece. it had me mesmerize. thanks for sharing with me.
-Queen of the Damned aka Allissia Renee
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