Darkened corners hide
me from my demons.
Keep them from
taking over me.
Go back into the hell
that you came from.
Take these fears
and cast them all away.
I am my own worst enemy
for all I keep inside.
In solitude...
I cry one last tear.
Tell me I was dreaming,
just a viscious nightmare.
All this wrong
that I have done.
Shake me alive
as I lay in death.
Cast me away one last time,
....away from you.
Can't take the pain
of what I've done.
In solitude...
I hold it all inside.
One more time I feel
a cold chill run through,
coursing my soul
...my bitter end.
I take my final bow
and exit stage left.
As I leave this world of grey
the sun has set on me.
Leaving me here
again in my solitude.
In solitude...
I take my last breath.
Author notes
Inspired by Solitude by Evanescence
In a list
A contest entry
- Amy Lee, We Love You by Sesheta.
700 points, ended September 20, 2007, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Darkwrite Extravaganza Season II, Round I by Immortal Obscurity.
400 points, ended May 19, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Evanescence Inspired Writes by brokenxxangel.
600 points, ended August 20, 2008, 27 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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The picture goes along with the poem effortlessly. Your poem is filled with great and strong emotions. The flow is easy and smooth and the break with "In solitude..." adds to the raw emotions and loneliness you feel from reading it. Great write and thanks for entering
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That picture is beautiful, and how I wish I had known of that contest! Amy Lee is amazing, and I had a feeling that this poem was inspired by one of her songs. I also wrote a poem called The Forsaken, based off of the same song that inspired this piece, so I recommend you check it out if that's your thing. Thank you for your entry, and good luck!
Laura x -
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Thank you for the HM and your kind words.
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Congrats on the silver!
A great piece, I like the group and this goes well. I love the small verses you've added in, they read great, as does the whole thing
great job, good luck
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thanks for entering the contest!!!
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This is an awesome poem. I love how much like Evanescence this poem sounds like. It would also make a great song. You don't have any flow problems and it's just perfect. I like this a lot because I can connect to it. I'm sure a lot of other people could too. I really like the 2 lines that started with In solitude. I think those through out the poem broke it up nicely and really added to the poem. This is awesome. Alyssa
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thanks I am glad you enjoyed this one...of all the poems I have done inspired by Evanescence this is one of my favs.
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Oh, yes... I can see why this one won silver! Amy Lee, I love you yoo I am a HUGE fan of hers, and I can see the resemblance to the song! Well done, and good luck!
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nicely done...
i really like this part
In solitude...
I hold it all inside.
good luck in my contest
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A bit choppy and hard to read. The flow seems..broken. Lots of raw emotion, however. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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Nicely written Ktulu
You captured lonliness very well here and have expressed it in words that at times escape the biggest heart.
You write so very well (whether it be stories or poems) and all I can say is well done - keep it up!
Your writing truly does impress me
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well done,, I liked the repeatitviness of the in solitude lines... harbouring some dark emotions and feeling in this..excelent bit of inspired poetry, good luck to you in the contest.
~Wolf~
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i love the way you can write in all genre's its awesome... i love the darkness that emerges from your pen ... well done and i wish you well in the contest
cheers
jen
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wow, this iss omething, you know i like this it kind os brings something out in me, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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When we are alone
oh the thoughts we think pale in comparison to the emotions that well up from the craggy bottoms of our soul. Solitude has never been my friend as i seek the light in others. Beautifully expressed
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So painful, but good poem.
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Damn.....this is to good and that picture goes so well with it, love the poem.
Love you much
Elizabeth
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WOW!!! definitely deep and dark
good one lobo
Roses to you
Teresa
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Definatly emotion filled and inspiring. Is that a pic of Trent Reznor?
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Powerful!!
The Inspiration used sure can get the voice heard through words
Powerful piece penned with the prompt in this contest and much emotion brought forth~
along with images to stain the Mind...
Best wishes to You in the contest!
to the family~
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Beautiful.. Loved this.. and I beleive I've felt like this before.. that's another plus. good luck in my contest.
~Kitten~
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