Aname, where are you going?
Upstairs to take a bath.
Aname, with legs like toothpicks
and a neck like a giraffe.
Aname, stepped in the bathtub.
Aname pulled out the plug.
Oh my goodness!
Oh my soul!
There goes Aname down that hole!
Glug, glug, glug.
Author notes
Okay, that's a little thing I came up with to get my 4 year old cousin to take a bath. It worked up until we let the water out, then she started freaking out, and understandably so.
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it was definitely a cute poem. yeah that typo really got me. please please please fix it.
please? lol.
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yeah, sorry bout the typo. it took me a while, but i figured out how to fix it. again, sorry!
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interesting! the only thing that irked me (though just a little) was the mini typo of "where" in the firt line.
aname is a nice name! this sounds like it could be part of a children's story. it's very visual, and has onomatopoeia too! maybe you can take her out of the bathtub before letting the water out? this poem reminds me of roald dahl's writing. it's very creative!
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