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Nephilim

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Nephilim

Leaning over, gasping for air on earth.
Breathing like smoke, billowing from a train.
Ripped from the ground, I found my new birth.
Locked in that box, I was going insane.

Yea, those in the darkness can never rest.
Committed to be a wandering soul;
the strain has me heaving deep in my chest.
How long was I buried, there in that hole?

Sentenced to wear these black wings that don’t fly
Immortal torment, for eternity,
and try as I may, I can’t even cry.
Ascension to heaven was not for me.

God has condemned me to dwell on this earth.
Tormented specter, condemned since her birth.

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Nephilim:
In the Torah and several non-canonical Jewish and early Christian writings, nephilim, (those causing others to fall) are a people created by the crossbreeding of the sons of God or man with unclean angles.

Sonnet:
Sonnets are formal poems and consist of 14 lines (3 quatrains and a couplet) , traditionally written in iambic pentameter - that is, in lines ten syllables long, with accents falling on every second syllable.
Form Resource: shadowpoetry.com

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  • Ithica silver member
    November 7, 2007

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    There must be alot of these (Nephilim) around, because every member of the human race is a son (or daughter) of God! The rest of the inhabitants may be of the celestial variety, but the unclean (fallen) variety would seem to outnumber the clean variety in matters of wanton procreation? No wonder we spend so much time tripping over ourselves and each other as we are pitched headlong towards our own fall! Misery does love to have company.... NOW, I have to say I REALLY ENJOYED reading your Demon Series. It was an awesome undertaking, with spectacular results !!!


  • RedAquarius
    June 14, 2007

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    Despair and cast-off-edness (yeah, I make up my own words, mk?) permeates this write. I feel rather sorry for the nephilim!


  • mysticstorm gold member
    May 18, 2007

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    WONDERFUL! A very strong and powerful write. Showing the truth depths of a tortured soul.
    Thank you for entering!


  • roses on fire
    May 16, 2007

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    wow i am crying of sadness and joy for you captured the depth of being a tortured immortal and i am impressed i feel sad for the creature but im still glad that ive never met one!!! i love you sooooooooooo much and this is an amazing poem you really did a good job in making it dark.wow i love you so much mommy have a wonderful evening!

    love you

    faith


  • Aeonna
    May 15, 2007

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    Chilling Dark

    O' dark poetess writes this piece of a cold wind, can chill anyone spine as you display the word nephilim,
    an excellent, dark masterpiece

    red roses


  • Never Fall in Love
    May 15, 2007

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    Sentenced to wear these black wings that don’t fly
    Immortal torment, for eternity,
    and try as I may, I can’t even cry.
    Ascension to heaven was not for me.

    I saw this peice last night, and wanted to read it so bad
    Just because I like the word: Nephilim
    And also because you've written it, and honestly, I'm lagging behind in reading anyone's work
    But this is beautiful
    I regret being sleepy and not reading it last night

    The poem itself has no flaws, atleast, none that I can see

    But I will say that the background and font color makes it hard to read

    Other than that, a more than amazing peice from you

     

    Love ya,

    NeveR <|3


  • Desire gold member
    May 15, 2007

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    Powerful!!

    This is one Magnificent piece in fine form~
    which You are so darn good at
    Love the Sonnet You have created and fit so well
    for this picture inspiration~
    Great info in the AC~
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent
    Love this one!!!

    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • painfully amazing
    May 15, 2007
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    wow... another AMAZING...write by you... this is amazing..i loved it=]

    nooreo


  • JohnnyD gold member
    May 15, 2007

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    Amera,

    this was just really excellent....really

    this stanza...was striking to me;
    Sentenced to wear these black wings that don’t fly
    Immortal torment, for eternity,
    and try as I may, I can’t even cry.
    Ascension to heaven was not for me.


    but then you dear, are no Nephilim as you're a wanted Angel, so no worry there.



    Dad


  • PANDAmonium
    May 15, 2007

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    Actually Amera a Nephilim is the child of a human and a fallen Angel. Not an "unclean" angel. Other than that this is indeed a great write. Bravo.

    Love be the message,
    Peace be the journey.

    Justin


  • bedovich
    May 15, 2007

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    wowwwwwwwwwww this is greatttttt : i love it alotsD: : welll done dearest


  • PerVirtuous
    May 15, 2007

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    Very dark. The immortal Nephilim are ungodly, and unwanted. A very good interpretation of the picture. I think they crossbred with humans just to muck up God's experiment with man. They didn't know we could do that fine on our own. Three bunnies!

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