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Only Half

To kiss the corner of your mouth,
only half chaste.
To hold your hand out in the rain,
only half cold.
To see your face in a tarnished mirror,
only half perfect.
Alone when I'm without you,
half a soul.
Only whole when I am with you,
I am yours.

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It's short; I don't do well with long poems. Leave me your honest opinions... I can handle criticism.

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  • 2lullabyhaven
    May 18, 2007
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    Actually

    This is great. The theme of only half played out well.

    • ineptitude
      May 20, 2007
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      Thanks

      Thanks! I wasn't sure if it was hokey or not.


      • 2lullabyhaven
        May 21, 2007
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        I found it very insightful. It's the way true lovers feel, especially when apart. You did good with it.


  • Aesthete
    May 16, 2007

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    Alex that was probably delicious. ANd you silly goose you have no need of metre and rhyme. Your point was made and felt. Good work pacha