I saved your shirt all soaked in blood, for it is all
That is left of the last second of your life,
Some may think I'm crazy, some may think I'm weird
Because your bloody shirt I hold so dear.
I kept your starter cap, it is blood stained too,
It holds the last thought you had, and so many memories of you.
I have the change that was in your pockets,
Knowing you had touched it last,
It could have been part of your future,
Now it is only your past.
I have the hair you and I shaved from your head,
Just a few days before you were pronounced dead.
But none of this helps me to say goodbye,
All these things do is make me cry.
I love you my son with every beat of my heart,
And I'm sorry that on this earth our lives had to part.
No one knows what these things do to me.
Yet I take them out and touch them
And then pack them back real neat ,
Knowing this is all I have until again we meet...
Author notes
This is a poem I wrote to my son Bubba who was killed in a car wreck at age 18 he was born on March27,1985 and died on august31,2003 along with 2 of his young cousins.
RIP option#1 option 1
I chose option #2
"Lycan lore, wholesome whore, breatheren bred, bloody bed!" option1 death
TexasMomma
Feelings
option#2sad
option #2
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800 points, ended May 26, 2007, 32 entries
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I understand...
I took my dad's ashes with me to my graduation with honors from college. Dad died two weeks before I graduated. I'm so sorry for your loss. Right now, I have my mother's ashes next to me in a holder I found at a moving sale that says MOM. A mini version of her larger urn fits inside perfectly.
I take mom's mini urn with me when I travel on trips. At first, when funeral home suggested it seemed morbid and I wished I hadn't done yet, now, I'm glad I did. I don't care who thinks crazy. We are all individuals and, to me, it just shows your and my love lives on. Tangible connections of a special loving bond forever alive in the spiritual realm and in our hearts.
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this was so beautiful
and so painful
i can't imagine what it
would be like to lose a son
i'm really soorry about your loss
this was a beautiful poem
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This is a very emotional and deep poem. Very good job chaneling your emotions with this.
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my brother lost his daughter in a bus accident out side there own front door she was 1 minute from home but it was never meant to be he is so lost without hereverything went through his mind did she suffer did she call out for him he takes no comfort in
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That must of been so bitter/sweet thinking of the words to write and must of cost you many tears and refreshed hurts. But we readers now know about this very special love you had for your boy. I can't even pretend I know what it feels like to lose a child, I can try to understand but the only ones who know are those who have been through the same pain. What I do understand though is your need to keep tangible things in his memory. You need to touch things that go with the memories in your heart and mind. I would have to do that too. Bless you in your grief and well done in your writing.
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Very sad.
I feel a deep soul in your poetry, and you have captured my interest. You put a lot of depth and feeling into your work. May God bless.
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This is such a sad piece, it is hard to lose a child no matter what age they are, in your mind they are always that baby you rocked to sleep in your arms.... beautifully penned
Karen
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Excellent Writing
The experience you share helps you and helps others learn to cope as well.
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This really touched me... I can understand keeping those things as the last part of him. And how heartbreaking it must be to look on them, yet that need is there to still do so.
Very emotional! I'm so sorry you lost your son.
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thank you for entering I really dont know what to say other then this touched my heart and brought a tear to my eye the best of luck to you
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Thank you for sharing your feelings with us. The picture to me was quite moving and brings tears to my eyes. God Bless You again TexasMomma.
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Thank you for entering my contest.
There's nothing more tragic then the loss of someone so close, and a child. And I think this poem is a genuine lament.
It is interesting that you keep what he wore and had of him. Some people, yes, do find it strange. I however, do not. I've heard of people doing so, but never really met someone who has...hopefully it has helped you, though I would understand concerns some may have, and would encourage you to let go, when you are ready. Sometimes holding onto the past, makes us live in it. He needs to find peace too.
*hugs*
It was a thoughtful and honest poem, and I hope writing it helped out a little.
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That is a beautiful poem as all of those i read by you. And i am so sorry for what happened with your dear Bubba. Truly i am, i lost my first best friend to a terrible car accident when i was ten.. Now i have a person i care most about, my love, he is also 18 now and i get very very scared when he is driving. Your poem is greatly rhymed and is so touching. very emoitonal. I love that. thank you so much for all of your shared poetry, seeing someone expressing such deep emotions in such a beautiful way is very inspirational.
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*I am so Sorry*
Thank you so much for your entry, I'm glad that you shared your feelings about your son with us, even though it must have been hard. I'm so sorry for your loss, and it made me cry! Thank you for your entry, and good luck in the contest.
All the best,
*Stephi*
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I'm sorry for your loss. I though this poem was very well written and the picture gave me chills. Good luck!
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Congrats on the two bronze trophies. This was very emotional to read and the picture was chilling. I respect you so much for having the courage to express your experience. Thank you for entering this extremely moving write and good luck in my contest, this was excellent.
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a bitter sweet lament for your son, so sad, raw and personal, thankyou, for allowing us all to share in this way your grief and pain, to sense your loss, to
experience the unimaginable for a moment through your reality. and to know your son knew love, through the pieces of you he held..
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WOW!
Words say so little sometimes. You have used your words to travel beyond and communicate with what so few people rarely do, raw emotion and unconditional love. So sorry. Again, words are not capable to express what you have given to us who have read this. Your love transcends and I'm sure you can still feel him and now I (though not knowing him) will at least remember him because of you. Thank You.
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This is a touching and powerful poem. I can imagine your sorrow. I am sorry for your loss. Thankyou so much for entering the contest. It's a truly great poem. Memories are what keep a person alive. I can feel the feelings of suffering when I read the poem.
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I really am amazed by this poem.
I hope you have recovered alright.
My sympathy is with you.
So sorry to hear about this.
Good luck in the contest.
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wow. i don't know what to say. this is an amazing write!
i do speech team at my school and i do poetry. my topic this year is money and how it effects people (like the change you kept from his pocket).
i was wondering if i could get your permission to use this piece in my program.
~bethany
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Increadible Write
Oh yes a mothers love. I don't think your weird at all. The memories and emotions in your heart that you share are beautiful and I feel honored to read them. A Piece Of You is a perfect title. I have pieces of my son too!! I take them out and neatly put them back and I weep, just as you. So sad and a excellent write of reality and heartache truth!!!
Blessings
Kelle
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Beautiful. Sad, emotional deep truthful and so caring, good luck. -paint
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no one is the same. some hold memories in their heart, deeply recorded within the mind, and others need mementos. Me, I never want to see the wall of names,
lost friends, too much to endure. May you have peace and his memories comfort you. success in the contest
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With such honest emotion, this poem is impactful and written very well. The feelings here are relatable and are expressed artfully. Thank you for entering, and I'm sorry for your loss.
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This is so very sad. I am so sorry for the loss of your son. I know this loss as I lost my first born son. I saved his hat as well, it too was stained with blood. But it was very dear to me. I could feel your emotions while reading this lovely piece. Thank you for using my contest to honor his memory. God Bless!
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wow. Strong emotional. if i cried, i'm sure it would have been here. As it was it made my heart clench and go you to you. much peace be with your son. thanks for entering this into my contest.
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The death of any loved one is hard to bear but is especially difficult when it is a child taken in such tragic circumstances. Being able to write and express such deep feelings is often the way to start on the long road of recovery.
This is a very personal piece of writing which instantly gives the reader the impression that time has stood still at the very second that this life was taken, which is of course what appears to happen for many people who have suffered such a sad event.
The feeling of sadness and despair is very evident from beginning to end and while that may be the author’s intention, I personally would have liked the last line to be more uplifting as it would leave the reader (and possibly the author) with a feeling that meeting again one day is a good and positive thing.
Thank you for entering the Raven Contest 2007 and good luck with your entry! Your work may also be viewed by other Raven judges.
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awwww this is very touching. I think that you are very courageous for having the strength to keep these things and cherishing them for what they are, which are reminants of your sons life past. It doesn't matter that they may seem strange to other poeple they are part of him. Being trapped in your memories of your son, i can only begin to imagine. Every line brings a tear to my eye, very powerful, makes ypu tink about treasuring all that we hold dear that much more. Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest, babi and im sorry for you loss xxxx
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I'm so sorry for your lose. This poem is a beautiful piece. I could feel your pain as I read the word you wrote.Thank you for sharing this with all of us.
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there are no words to describe the pain a parent must feel when losing a child unexpectedly...simply a gorgeous poem that flows very naturally filled with the deepest emotions a person can feel....good luck with this mourning that will never end (i kno 'cause i lost my father)...cherish the memories - always - n like u said, til the day u meet again -
Oh this is so very very sad. My heart goes out to you and your family. But in a way I know that my friend shall find comfort in this, if merely for the fact that she can see that she is not alone. Thank you from the bottom of my heart for entering this piece and much love to you. Claire
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Beautiful, sad, and full of emotion. I love how you expressed the "strange" attachments that come after death to anything that reminds one of the deceased person. This is gorgeous and heartfelt.
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oh this is sad. what a great write. this is awesome. i am sorry for your loss.
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