Misery loves company,
hey look over there is that angry I see?
Here comes hate walking through the door,
bringing with it a whole lot more.
Well over there is confusion and hurt,
and there is frustration playing in the dirt.
I believe that pain is here too,
who is that singing,I believe it is the blues.
Bad memories just walked in,
bringing along tears just one more of our friends.
Wishing I were dead has showed up too,
well hello lonely how do you do?
nobody cares is hanging around,
over there is boredom laying on the ground.
disbelief just came through the door,
and denial is brought with it even more.
I must be really popular ,look at all these friends,
together we won't be alone,we'll stick together till the end.
Love and happy and all of the such,
go away please I don't miss you that much.
Author notes
option #1 Misery loves it's company!
A contest entry
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475 points, ended May 17, 2007, 16 entries
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Comments
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i liked it but it seemed like the poem was missing something, thank you for entering and good luck
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wow.. thats about all i got.. this was a great piece of work and if you keep writing like this it wouldnt surprise me if you wrote a book.. this was amazing.. good luck and thanks for entering.
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This Is All to Real
I agree with this poem so much. I like it and I think that everyone should read it over and over and over again. I know I will. Keep writing and I'l keep reading.
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Thanks for the entring.
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yes
despite the fact that personifying emotions irks me. haha -
Wow. Good write.
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Very nice, but I don't think this will win, so I'm going to remove this from the contest. [I have 100 entries.. it's easier to stay organized by doing this] Thanks for entering though.
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when one is sad and miserable company is sometimes welcome but it is not by me
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Anything & Everything Thing.
Punctuation, while not critical to meaning, can be.
One might, for example, have placed a colon in place of the comma at the end of line 1, so to cast Misery in the observer role.
"singing that what I believe is the blues" may have scanned better. Truly, much as the dominant flow and rhyme of the poetess here writing is good, betimes the undercurrent is flawed perhaps by the intrusion of mental consideration of reading into the writing hands' flow. [Such is certainly a phase in the artistic development of the poetic art, that the twin currents which interplay upon the Cadeuceus Apollein may seperate and rear away from the central stem about which they twine. If it be known that of which I speak.]
"along tears,.." or "tears. Just..." The latter would connote a final note to the Throat of Comprehension on its way to Digestion.
"popular! Look..." would introduce sarcasm to the proceedings, perhaps to become the company that Misery most loves (in another stanza, were one to add that concept later, mayhap).
"...that much.
In fact I'd rather be alone to at one
With the irony that has won my heart,
Inverted the perverted, and become
Husband of my soul: sarcasm on a roll."
eg. Alters the rhyme scheme, which, just as a couplet after a series of abab rhymes can bruing a crashing conclusion, may be highly useful. Certainly one would not be unaware of it.
Anyway, more good work.
MA.
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Nice!!!
I like the word flow, and have definitely been there a time or two in my life... -
Intriguing approach ...
as you anthropomorphize various negative emotions. You've got quite a lengthy list going here.
Regarding your request for critique on 1st/last line and title: the title, while familiar and an instant clue to verse content, is cliché. I know you know that. Is there any way you can rewrite that using your own, fresh words?
Oh, I see you won a gold trophy for this entry in a contest. Congratulations. You probably won't want to tweak it, then, but winning a contest here at AP doesn't equate to perfect verse. (Am sure you realize that, too.) At any rate, you asked for specific critique and here it is. Use or toss, as you wish.
Thanks, again, for stopping by to read a piece of my writing.
-- Caroligné
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This was wonderfully written I must say I like it and definetly impressed, thank you for entering and great write
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I absolutely love this piece! This is one of the best poems I've read for a while! I love the rhyming, and the metaphors, and the message! Truly an amazing piece
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Very cool write...Love it. Like how you use all of the words of a person feelings like they are a person too. Congrad on the gold.
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EXCELLENT
THE BEST ONE IVE READ TODAY THANK YOU
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Wowzers!
I love the personification...never have i EVER read a poem like this...it's so completely unique and wow you did really deserve the gold trophy..do you mind if i quote you ever? the way you've put all these negative emotions in different situations connected nad as "friends"...it realy applies to people too. GJ!!
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Wow, I love this. It's so unique and at the same time powerful. Good job!
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I enjoyed this piece a lot, I have been down to these depths, where the only things that can be felt are all these negative emotions. To write about them has always been good therapy for me. Very well expressed. Great job.
Rory
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oh my gosh. this was so good. You know those butterflies you get in your stomach? I got those reading this? I don't know why.. haha, it got me really excited? even though it's completely not even happy... Good luck in my contest!
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Keep an eye on that boredom over there, you never know what he'll inspire! I always get my best stuff when I'm totally bored. But you never know, sometimes boredom inspires trouble!
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