Toes tread softly upon espial timbers
Each coarse cleat - an exclamation of survival
Tentative gestures emanate new confidences
As rapturous approval encircles vessel's waist
And let fall admonition, and engendered caution
for we have naught but the eye for taking;
So long have we labored to stand in this place
we shall not tarry long nor leave unfulfilled
Heart pulsates wildly in conflagration
Distilling haunted fears of yesteryear
This inferno incloses a matrix, each vein
Urging to perambulate through its radiant surge
And in the rush of crowding bravery
every sinew committed to the line
the heat we share of raging blood
to the mark of our very souls, in this shining moment.
Author notes
Option #8.b. Collaboration between Peteskid and Laura Lamarca
In a list
A contest entry
- Live... Love... Laugh... Learn... INSPIRE!!! by Wild Mustang.
900 points, ended June 1, 2007, 40 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - It Takes Two ~ Collaboration Contest by Florida Sunshine.
500 points, ended March 23, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is a terrific written poem ~ it can keep the attention of any reader! The flow is smooth ~ and I thoroughly enjoyed reading this
Well done!
Thanks for entering this into the "It Takes Two" contest ~ I do appreciate you sharing your work with me ~ you BOTH did a fantastic job! -
very vivid and spellbinding
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This is great Laura; thanks for linking me! The vocabulary is fantastic and you built it into a fluid delivery. The corporal intertwining of the souls is evident. The problem with this co-write is I can't tell who wrote what. As a stand alone poem it's wonderful but knowing it's a co-write makes me wonder which writer is responsible for what image.
Love,
Amera
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I wrote stanzas 1 & 3, PK masterfully penned stanzas 2 & 4. Thanks for your comments and applause sis, I'm glad I was able to share this with you
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BEAUTIFULLY WORDED
GREAT IMAGERY LOVED IT
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Thank you for commenting and applauding, PK & I both appreciate it
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Very nice
I loved the flow and vocab used here; the imagery was very powerful. Higher level vocab, as done here, does not always flow well, but no worries here!
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Thank for your comments and applause, PK and I are glad you enjoyed the read
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Wow, that really is inspiring! The whole thing flowed so well, from beginning to end, and the language you used was so powerful and passionate, full of love and emotion. Good job, you guys
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Thanks for reading and commenting, PK & I both very much appreciate it Love you much. Mum
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Beautiful piece! The wording is melodic and enchanting. Best use of vocabulary I've seen in awhile! Good job. Best of luck in the contest and also in all of your future endeavors, the both of you!
~ Wild
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Another brilliant collab, very different from your others but vivid in its metaphors and imagery. Love, C
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very nice. good job with writing this. you do so well with the collabs. i like this. i have a feeling the second and fourth stanzas are yours?
nice job on both parts. enjoyed. good luck in the contest.
blu
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Interesting Concept
I see the joining of two souls and they come together
for a reason. They seek completion, and will not wait or take long. Excitement builds, before walking into the crowd. Strong metaphors, and very deep imagery. This was amazingly creative piece..........novy
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Thank you
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I think this is wonderfully beautiful you two! Awesome writing! You've created a wonderful piece and I wish you all the very best in this contest! Bravo and kudos!
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Thank you, we're glad you enjoyed the read
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I must agree, you are a mighty fine poet. The both of you, I guess should say. I love all of the vocabulary you use(I only had to look up two words). Usually those kinds of words throw off the flow of a poem, but not in this case. This is a great free verse write and I hope you do well in the contest.
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Thank you for your comments and applause, they're both much appreciated
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It was my honor to write with you, I have admired your work over a period of time; you have made some unique and outstanding contributions...PK
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Thank you very much for collabing on this piece with me PK, I've never been so proud before of any piece I've written. You're a mighty fine poet & don't you forget it! Laura x
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