Won’t let anybody tell me that we’re too young,
‘cause I can see the future when we’ve barely begun.
Oh, the path may be winding, the path may be long,
but I’ve finally found the place where I know I belong.
I’m at home in your eyes, in your head, in your heart,
and I’ll never let anything tear us apart.
You came into my life and made me see the light –
baby, thanks to you I believe in love at first sight.
I haven’t known you for long, but it feels like forever,
I want us to spend the rest of our days together.
The future’s full of surprises; I don’t know what’s in store,
but there’s so much about you that I want to explore.
I’m at home in your eyes, in your head, in your heart,
and I’ll never let anything tear us apart.
You came into my life and made me see the light –
baby, thanks to you I believe in love at first sight.
Now that I have you, life moves to a different beat –
I never knew it was possible to feel this complete…
I’m at home in your eyes, in your head, in your heart,
and I’ll never let anything tear us apart.
You came into my life and made me see the light –
baby, thanks to you I believe in love at first sight.
Baby, thanks to you I believe in love at first sight…
Author notes
You are more than welcome to use my songs; if you do, I would appreciate a recording if that's at all possible! 
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A contest entry
- Loves Delight by karma-n-peace.
1100 points, ended October 7, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Passions by Ephiphany.
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Comments
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Judges Verdict
This is Simply beautiful theres no other words to explain it, i will put chords and a tune to this, did you have any certin tune in mind? if so let me know
i will try to record it someday, although i have no way to right now add me as a favourite and i will get it to you sometime. Thank you for the entry your going in the finalist list
Best of Luck To You
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Hmm, tempo's around 110, 120, it changes every time I sing it lol... very upbeat haha
Thankyou so much for your lovely comment!!
Maria
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do u mind if i slow it down
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Of course I don't mind!!
Maria
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These are just wonderful song lyrics! I can see this being put to music oin the future! Thank you for your entry
Gaylene
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Love it =)
This is really good,
And the chorus is Really catchy.
Reminds me of me and my boyfriend at first
Great write
-♥Amanda♥
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"I haven’t known you for long, but it feels like forever,"
isn't that the greatest feeling. i loved the rhyme, i loved this write, so positive and upbeat. GREAT job.
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Great
yet again...you have managed to overcome all odds and break the barriers of poetry...you never cease to amaze me...
keep writing
♥Karlie♥
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ooh great lyrics. sing 'em to me! lol just kidding, but I do like these. It has a wonderful flow to it. Absolutely beautiful (and very relatable).
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GREAT lyrics! awesomely done. i loved the flow and rhyme.
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A creation of beautiful lyrical sentiment.
This has a Romeo and Juilet feeling about it. I love the descriptions, they are all about a loves hunger and dedication.
Beautifully written!
Thank you for entering, you guys are making this contest near impossible to judge
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Awwwww that's so beautiful! How are you at the moment girlie?
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Holy crap I just discovered the comment lol... I'm not too bad, how are you??
Maria xoxox
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Wow, what a beautiful piece of writing!
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Thankyou Christopher, I'm glad to see you back!!
Maria xoxox
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Breath taking!
Won’t let anybody tell me that we’re too young,
‘Cause I can see the future when we’ve barely begun.
Oh, the path may be winding, the path may be long,
But I’ve finally found the place where I know I belong.
This is a beautiful piece of art here my friend!
I love your smoothness and rhyme!
Great job, I stand and applaud you.
Good luck with your sweetheart.
Now that I have you, life moves to a different beat –
I never knew it was possible to feel this complete…
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Thankyou so much for taking the time to leave such a lovely comment!!!
Maria xoxox
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Omg I LOVE this well done!!
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Thankyou so much!!
Maria xoxox
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Awwww... it's like most perfect wedding vows ever, not that they are, it's just what it reminds me of! Your flow and rhyming in this is absolutely perfect, I am in awe of your rhyming skills.
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Thankyou so much for the awesome comment!!
Maria xoxox
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good
Great job with rhyming, nothing seems forced, and it flows very well. This poem seems like it should be lyrics to a song, I would love to see this set to a tune or something. I like the repetition of "baby, thanks to you I believe in love at first sight." I also like the line, "now that i have you, life moves to a different beat".
But I definitely can see this set to music, I think that would be really awesome. I hope your boyfriend appreciates this, it's really good and soooo sweet. -
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Thanks, I did actually write it as a song and it sounds really cool... and my boyfriend does appreciate it - he wrote the guitar part for me!! Thanks so much for commenting!!
Maria xoxox
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Very beautiful write here There are a few questions that comes to my mind
Will you still love him years down the road
Will you still love him when he tells you no
Will you still love him when theres no money to go out
Will you still love him when hugs turns to shouts
Will you still love him when he starts comeing home late
Or ' or you dreaming a dream without fate all these things happen will you hold on to that love for a promise given to the man above The same for the boy do you love her enough for true love grows it never goes
for as your sight does age will you hold him for one more day .
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Thankyou very much for taking the time to comment
Maria xoxox
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great work.. this is very great..i love it.. lovely awww i like this..i enjoyed this alot.. from beginning to end.. Heather
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Thankyou so much for the lovely comment!!
Maria xoxox
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Great write. I love the imagery and the rhyme. This is such a beauitful poem. I know every feeling and every thought. It's so amazing. Thanks for this write. Great piece.
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Thankyou so much for the lovely comment, I appreciate it!!
Maria xoxox
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'I’m at home in your eyes, in your head, in your heart,
And I’ll never let anything tear us apart.
You came into my life and made me see the light –
Baby, thanks to you I believe in love at first sight.'
^^^^ I love the chorus, and the flow,
I think it's great how it's flows like a song, great write =] ♥
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Thankyou so much for taking the time to leave such a lovely comment!!
Maria xoxox
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It's nice to see a happy poem from you. It's been a long time - Enjoy the moment while it lasts. Be happy, you've earned it.
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LOL, it doesn't happen often, does it?? Thanks so much
Maria xoxox
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Nicely worded
You begin with the negation of an attitude, and affirm your capacity to see through time and look into what you believe to be the core - the inward centre of love.For you this moment of love is not fleeting.
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Thankyou so much for the lovely comment!
Maria xoxox
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This was good.
I like your rhymes and your flow went well. The content was cliche and sappy, as I'm sure you know... but it was sweet and seemed heartfelt. Your rhyming of young and begun is a stroke of genius - it made me do a double take it was so near! Great job.
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Thanks so much for the comment - I know the content was cliched but that's how I'm feeling right now!!
Maria xoxox
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