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- Sacred Site - ( By Bullet Train )

 

 

 

Last Call’, conductor announced at depot~
Bullet train bound, thirteen passengers boarded.
Sacred Site, the zenith destination
for intense Soul searching,
leaves at exactly midnight.

          Virtual brochure firmly focused
          on exploration, vision expansion
          and untapped mines.

Encouraged courageous to come,
thrillseekers also reserved, actually anybody
in need of a rush
but must be able to tolerate
extreme weather conditions, cold and hot;
ability to blend in like a chameleon.

Elementals frequently engaged in skirmishes
with wary at checkpoints,
would only tolerate travel
beyond a set radius.

          Bohemian legend spoke of specific borders,
          ley lines to be respected.
          Boredom bragged as an excuse to cross
          by self proclaimed courageous individuals,
          ignorance took precedence.

          Disturbance of domain,
          reaped consequences from curse
          placed on persons
          who violated posted  -Keep Out- signs.

Train ventured through secretive society
     between tall trees into valley of dolls
          with view of  porcelain prairie landscape;
     afterwards, over bridge of belief,
eventually arrived under tunnel of truth.

Appeared as if someone, something
followed path, focused on occupants.

           Right of passage through threshold-

Last Stop’, conductor announced at depot~
Bullet train unboarded, one passenger.
Others strayed, could not continue;
temptation took them away
through sulfur scented mist,
shaped like hands.

          The climb cumberson to reach doors entrance,
          Sacred Site challenged Seeker
          in search of Soul
          which started exactly at midnight
          when train door closed.

 

Author notes

Spiritual Journey begins from within...


Required Word Bank~

futuristic, exploration, courageous, secretive, tolerate,
virtual, zenith, wary, ability, radius, dispense, bohemian,
boredom, efficiency, frequently...

Reference Links:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ley_line
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Elemental

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  • Angels Delight
    June 11, 2007

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    WOW...What a journey

    My Dear poet

    I do believe as you do that a spiritual journey starts from within and you definitely took me on a wonderful one...Showing how some fall off due to temptations and how one should stay strong in their convictions to get to the end and find oneself...

    I hope this is what you meant when you wrote this poem...That is what I got from it...

    So I want to thank you for entering my contest and wish you only the best of luck

    Much Love
    Tessa


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    May 28, 2007

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    Wow

    Very very pleased to see a trophy on this wonderful piece. Well done. Very very well done. Congratulations. ~Pamela

  • Virgoan
    May 27, 2007

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    Magnificent description of a travel! The words and images are great! As always from a good poet like you.

    My favorite lines:

    Bohemian legend spoke of specific borders,
    ley lines to be respected.
    Boredom bragged as an excuse to cross
    by self proclaimed courageous individuals,
    ignorance took precedence.

    Congratulations for winning. Indeed, a very good write.

    Thanks for sharing and see you around my friend.

    ~VIRGOAN~


  • Griswold silver member
    May 26, 2007

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    Excellently written story with a great sense of captivation to it, kept me mesmorized throughout. Awesome job!!!...Scott


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    May 16, 2007

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    Wow. You more than conquered the contest with this write. The word bank words fit right in, the tale was intriguing and had a moral to it. The symbolism of these lines spoke to me:
    "Train ventured through secretive society
    between tall trees into valley of dolls
    with view of porcelain prairie landscape;
    afterwards, over bridge of belief,
    eventually arrived under tunnel of truth.

    Appeared as if someone, something
    followed path, focused on occupants.

    Right of passage through threshold-"
    I throw roses at your feat, dear Desire!


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    May 16, 2007

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    Well all right then~this is wonderful even better than the picture...great ride and the feel was awesome...Thank you so much for entering the contest...


  • StarEyes
    May 14, 2007

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    Holy Moly! Wow what a read you have here! This is just amazing! I am totally left speechless. I wish I could find words to say about this one. Best of luck in the this contest!


    and much love

    Nettie


  • Amera gold member
    May 14, 2007

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    Whooo Whooo all aboard!

    Fantastical! You created an entire fantasy from the picture. Your poem is better than the picture. I need to read this a few more times, it is so cool!

    Love,
    Amera


  • penman gold member
    May 14, 2007

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    Excellent

    Oh my goodness sweetness what a trip you let us travel. This was terrific and the picture truly wonderful too. Many blessings in the contest.


  • Puppydog gold member
    May 14, 2007
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    A BEAUTIFUL JOURNEY

    This is one journey I wish I was taking. Only a few get to see the end though.

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