As I lye here nearly dead
alone and practically freezing
I think of My life flashing before my eyes
one by one they flood my sight .
as I think of what I've done wrong
realizing its to late to change
hope my life has meaning
wish I had another chance to tell my
friends and family goodbye .
And tell them how much i love them
I don't want them to grieve too much
as my life blood drains away
I feel it trickling out of me
I start to get a warm sticky feeling in my hands
the stain of the blood on the bed
will always mark where i layed
I think of my good life
inmy last moments of despair.
A contest entry
- Rise of the Darkness by Psychoticemochick.
600 points, ended June 3, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - When Darkness Takes Over by Starz of Heaven.
525 points, ended June 9, 2007, 22 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Any... old or new thing ...at all! ...ANYTHING EVERYBODY!!!! by wendymolly.
750 points, ended June 16, 132 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Tales from the End by Girl Mad As Birds.
450 points, ended October 28, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Nice, there's a deep feeling of sadness and regret running through this piece that I really felt.
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This was a good read. I can see why this is an award wining piece. Very well done. Keep up the good work.
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This is beautifully sad. I can almost feel the despair and the wish to be able to say goodbye. Very well written. Good luck in the contest.
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So dark and deeply sad. A piece filled with imagery and intense emotion. Thanks for sharing... x Love and light, Butterfly.
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its realy sad, i was tearing up!!
but its also realy truthful, cuz death is a natural part of life, ironic, yet true! good job!
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Feeling It...
the imminent death and the idea of what one might think of in that moment, eerily good
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very dark, yet again it's reality, for if we live we surely must die someday. that's why living the best we can along the way is important, and you tell the story well here
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This is a very nice write thank you for shairng it with me and adding it to the contest. Best of luck to you
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wow this is amazing i really liked it!!!
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wow, this is really good. Good luck.
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at last! a drak write! Im so ecstatic to see this from you that I may faint! this is one of the best dark writes you have ever written, and thats no lie. keep them up.
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ahhh a very dark write sadness and dispare through out but sometimes these dark emotions can be what helps us heal a sad but well written write keep it up
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