Society builds broken men
and
buildings taller than I understand
with expectations on top of them
and
all eyes are watching
the news with new evidence suggesting that
seeing is misleading
and
Believing is blind, blunt
Faith in invisible explanations
and
Adam bowled the earth at pins set up to fail
a long time ago, in a garden far away
and
some of us are still mourning
because
we're still rolling
and
our inner ears are shaken
and
our hearing ears are ringing
and...
things just keep piling up
Please tell me what you think
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This poem is okay...the loud background kind of hurts my eyes...
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I know, it hurts my eyes too, It just seemed appropriate.
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good
your way of comparing types was excellent. it made you envision the two as to how they're similar yet different. It gave you clear mental pictures.
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So true what you say here and it is sad we all see it and just keep watching for we dont know where to start to fix it .
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I am not at all certain what this means but it seems to have to a religous underlying thingummy which I do not like so there.
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Thanks for your honesty, I appreciate that, I feel I should tell you that I am not a Religious fanatic or anything, but it is part of my life so I suppose it bleeds into my poetry.
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Interesting.
I read the begining at your house a while back. I like what you did with this. -
This is awesome! I also love that line about Adam. That's so awesome.
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Thanks so much!
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I like this. It's an interesting piece, and I like how you used your intertextual abilities to explain the piece perfectly. I also like that you made this poem about faith.
"Adam bowled the earth at pins set up to fail" -This line is so cool! It's like the world is all planed out. It's a bit sad, and poetic. Nicely done.
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