you are going to die
you will lose your fingers first
i'm going to cut them off with the dullest knife
i can find
you deserve to die
your balls will be cut off
with the dullest pocket knife
i can find
and after i have cut your limbs off
i'm going to tie a noose around your neck
and drag you to the highest cliff
i can find
there you will hang
but not for long
i have more plans for you
i will drench you in gasoline
as you hang
in front of those who hate you
and then i will find a blowtorch
and burn you
to a crisp
we will watch you burn
as your soul goes on
to burn in hell as well
and we
will
laugh
our asses off
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wow, i gotta say the background turned me off, but the poem definantly made up for it. well done, and thanks for entering
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okay ya i'm commenting in my own poem but i don't care. it's supposed to rhyme and have structure but this is as disturbing as ever so "I DON'T CARE!!!"
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This is brilliant...I absolutely love it. It captures my cruel sense of humor and the irony of the background is genius. Thank you, I had a lot of fun reading this! lol.
I think the only the I would change is the last verse. I dont like the one-word lines and I think you should have said will laugh in a line by itself. Also, (just a personal preference) I think it would have been a lot better written in a sadder tone. Idk how else to describe it.
Good job. Love the background. Good luck -
I'm gonna leave this one up to my best friend to judge...
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nicely done i really like it it kinda of reminds me of something i would write lol well done mate good luck
nightmare xx
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Sounds like issues.
This reminds me of a novel I read about ancient Iraq in which they did just that. It sounds like serious issues with an ex boy or girl friend.
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YES!
I love it!
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wow that was reallyn crazy!!! great write! good luck!
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