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Last Words

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Minutes are passing like racing bullets
As I lay here, breathless, in your arms
I can feel my last seconds with you coming
As the blood seeps from my wounds like a river

How can I find the last bits of language to utter?
Which words will be enough to last forever?
How can I say that I've loved you since the start
Enchanted by those forest-green eyes?

What way can I convey that I'm sorry to cut our time short?
Perhaps if I'd been more careful, we'd have more time?
But love, truthfully I'm glad it's me and not you
Because the lack of your presence would kill me slowly

Between the wheezing and the sighs of pain
How can I tell you what would take an eternity to say?
I want to tell you every single feeling in my heart
And have you know me as you now never shall

The other side materializes before my eyes
And then I know what it is I must say:
"Remember love, it is better to spend a beautiful year
Than fourteen or more mediocre ones together

Do not regret that death took me away
For it makes what we had much more precious
Carry me forever in your heart, love
I'll carry you forever in mine."

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Author notes

A non-rhyming poem from me for the first time in a year or so !!! Hope you think it's at least decent, Mally.

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  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    June 11, 2007

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    Excellent

    So pleased to see a trophy on this wonderful verse. Very very well done. A pleasure to read and enjoy. ~Pamela


  • Malabu
    June 11, 2007

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    Very well Written piece

    not bad for a rhyming poet....diction is excellent as is the grammar and spelling....

    Between the wheezing and the sighs of pain
    How can I tell you what would take an eternity to say?
    I want to tell you every single feeling in my heart
    And have you know me as you now never shall

    Says what your feel and knowing....your love is futile in the end....still we plead with our words....gone un listened
    lovely but sad story of love gone weary
    Mal


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    June 5, 2007

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    This touched to the very heart and soul of my being
    Deeply poignant and so full of emotion
    Thank you for sharing this and for being a part of the contest


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    May 14, 2007
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    Excellent

    This moved me deeply. A wonderful entry. ~Pamela