Everytime I'm missing you,
write another one of these,
paint a vivid picture of
me begging on my knees,
Times a damn good healer,
your name's faded from my arms,
so you'd have thought 2 years
would allieviate your charms.
Write another ode to you,
everytime i'm feeling lonely,
all the paper i've filled up,
mile upon mile of If Only,
Times a f*&%ing w*&ker,
since times not on my side,
why can't time give me a
place that i can go and hide?
Line the inside of my heart
with word upon twisted word,
i know you read my soul's contents,
so why have you not heard?
time gave me my opportunity,
but i was to idle to grab it,
so while you were in her arms,
while i was forming this habit.
Sink beneath the paper waves
of this wild emotive sea,
i always wonder if i had asked
would you have rescued me?
seems times enjoying his hobby,
of sending me increasingly mad,
what kind of evil fate is that?
to want what you've never had.
Falling down this paper escape,
from this flaming tower of pain,
is it me, or does this hurt less?
or perhaps i'm just going insane,
ticking times now 2 years gone,
and i think my bruised hearts healing,
and not at a moment to soon,
i was being murdered by that feeling.
Blood spreads across paper like ink
and i wrote your name in mine,
you never got to see it of couse,
I always told you i was fine,
now time doesnt hurt so much,
but these feelings have far from died,
just remember if your ever in need
i'll be instantly by your side.
Everytime i'm missing you,
write another one of these,
paint a vivid picture of
all these painful memories.
Author notes
memories? check.
painful ones? check.
enough depressing imagery to keep an AFI fan happier than a pig in s*&t? check. all set then.
A contest entry
- Empty and Pain-filled by Fallen Grace.
500 points, ended May 15, 2007, 20 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This poem fits well with the title. Great job. I like how you repeated the stanza
"Everytime i'm missing you,
write another one of these,
paint a vivid picture of
all these painful memories."
The poem flowed really well and it does give a lot of imagery and emotion. Again Great job and Good luck in my contest!
~:~Kaela~:~ -
wow this immediatley reminded me of this guy alex. i liked the whole things except towards teh end i got alittle lost. It reminds me so very much of me and alex and it makes me want to cry when i read this i started tearing up. the title really does match the poem. this was a really really good write please do keep up the good work i look forward to reading more and i enjoyed reading this
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Pretty good. I'm curious though, wasn't stanza five very similar to what you wrote in your other poem? This showed much more feeling than the other poem of yours I've read.
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