Candles snuffed and cold
from a love promised to forever,
trust lost and extinct from lust and deceit.
The price of lies and deception immeasurable,
as anger consumes, profanities howl, like a wolf in the night.
Emotions vanished where eternal vows were once dedicated.
Lives left in decay and devastation from erroneous senses of conceit.
A contest entry
- Seven Lines by Lj-.
300 points, ended May 27, 2007, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Very complex, to me. Feelings described nicely.
Thank you for your entry,
Best of luck!
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Excellent
Very well done and so creative. Such great emotions. Good luck in the contest.
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the emotions in this were realy sad and strong and it made the poem unique and amazing
sorta made me think about promises that people promised me when they said they would be there always only to run away from me and leave me to mend my heart,
you described ever emotions really well in this and i loved it
good luck in the contest
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Wow, yep. You can definitely feel the emotions in this and its so beautiful and sad. :’( but also very lovely.
Lol. You know something, I learnt how to spell definitely today, well in the past 30seconds. Scary what you find out to don’t actually know how to spell at year ten level. Lol.
Well good luck in the contest and I’m in a reviewing mood so you’ll probably get a lot of reviews from me until I can escape my “health” class. I’m doing work, I swear it, lol.
Claire-Anne
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Awesome edit, I think the openers are now the entire poem, and are awesomely done!
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I think here's where I start crying, this was so beautiful sad. I really felt the emotion in it. Nawr, expecially the first three lines, my Gawd, what openers!!!
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