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.......................Calm Seas and Full Holds...

even though the engine was still running
the clanking, smoke and obvious lack of power
unmistakably told him they were not going home

he took stock of the situation,
looking across the sea
to the approaching storm clouds

"These trips have been the best"
he said to his boat
"I wouldn't give them up
for the safety of land
now or ever"


calmly, he plotted his course
prepared his gear as always
losing himself in familiar actions
no matter how inappropriate

as the rain came
wind picked up
and swells became angry
he held fast to the rudder
and lost himself in memories
of calm seas and full holds

never loving his boat more than now

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Angel - This is about the mortality of a loved one.

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  • AngelDreamer
    May 17, 2007
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    great flow over all amazing poem thanks for entering and good luck

  • Trueheartforlife
    May 14, 2007

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    Very good

    This was a silky write which had a great flow. My favorite part was:

    as the rain came
    wind picked up
    and swells became angry
    he held fast to the rudder
    and lost himself in memories
    of calm seas and full holds


    That painted a great picture. Great job and best of luck in your writing future.

    . Rewarded 6

  • Lorot
    May 14, 2007

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    Carefully woven. I like the deep imagery employed here of our mortality. It is comfortably intertwined with a sea experience. I also love the dots before the title showing 'unfinished business' perhaps? The background of a sea is carefully chosen. All the best in the contest!

  • oldpoets
    May 14, 2007
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    great metafore, nice smooth write and joy to read.


  • 2lullabyhaven
    May 14, 2007

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    This Is Kind Of Funny

    Cause your write made me think of when one is struggling for things, or aiming for something, your
    grasping for it should never waiver, no matter what, go down with your ship or safely land, it's all the same ball of wax. That's what good poetry does for one, transports them into the recesses of their own minds. Point made. smile

    . Rewarded 6

  • ajalee
    May 14, 2007

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    I love how you've brought in the dual nature of the sea. Many poems only look at one side of the coin: the beach, sailing on a calm day, etc. Here you've brought out the other side, the rough angry side of the sea--and your character still loved it. Nice job.

  • Gabreon
    May 14, 2007

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    A great metaphor for mortality. The imagery and emotion in each description is very genuine, bringing the reader into the mind of the character. Well done, a enjoyable read.
  • Godwin
    May 14, 2007

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    What we take for granted in peaceful times we value the most in troulbed times - just the irony of life. Quite a thought-provoking piece here. Keep it up.

    . Rewarded 4


  • Swan song gold member
    May 14, 2007
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    That is a cool poem. It's been years since I've been on a boat.


  • Amera gold member
    May 14, 2007

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    You were right when you told me your next poem would make me cry. I then realized the captain said a prayer and the Lord came down and scooped up the little ship with one hand and set it once again in calm seas.

    Love,
    Amera

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