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Human Nature

We ordain
The slain
With pain
We explain
The profane
And Insane
All in vain



A contest entry

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  • Sgt B
    June 5, 2007
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    You know what?

    This actually makes sense to me. TRUE DAT!


  • Lj-
    May 23, 2007
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    I like the mono-rhyme and short lines.


    Thank you for your entry,
    Good luck!


  • Trueheartforlife
    May 15, 2007

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    Very Good

    This was a very very very good poem. Gold for sure in my mind. The rhyming was very complex and interesting. While all keeeping the same subject matter. Great job and best of luck in your writing future.
  • Climbing2nothing
    May 14, 2007
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    YEAH, well done with the special zen, chosing the right words in a seven line contest is no 'ordainary' thing, and so circled you have achieved, a very well rhymed and stand alone existant excuse, like the spaces that are left in the mind speak in bubbles upon bubbles, anyhays for the profane vanity of presents thanks for sharing with chocolate- JAS

    . Rewarded 6