Darkness of night lies
In the eyes of beloved-
Pillows of solace.
Time to pluck the stars tucked in
The Milky Way of dreamland.
Author notes
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A contest entry
- Prewritten Haiku & Tanka. by TheSpiralGenerator.
1000 points, ended April 1, 29 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Nice. Captivates the mind.
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Thanks! I am glad u enjoyed the write
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CONGRADULATIONS ON THE GREENIE
words worthy of a star of their own,
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thank u so much!!
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oh I do like this!!
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Sis! You don’t know how much this page made me happy. I found an Iranian poet here at last and that is the one who commented here, yeah Mr. Rezaee. I’m so interested for that. You know, I felt a bit uncomfortable that there is not Iranian poets here.
About your poem, you know that you created another wonderful poem. The milky way to dreamland! How sweet, Khahar joonam. You are great and not only in poetry but also in spirit, too! Love you
~Vernal Bloom~
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Aha ! How sweet ! The theme is so true and so close to my heart. I liked the image : "Pillows of solace".....And the last lines are the most endearing. Particularly, the metaphor of "the Milky Way of dreamland" alone deserves three big, hearty applauses owing to the beautiful feeling it gives to the reader ! Keep penning down your enriching thoughts !
With prayers and wishes
Naila.
P.S : Dear Apee, please pray for my final exams. I really, really want good marks.
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Very Beautiful!!!
Wow!!!! your poem is really beautiful. it is a very delicate poem adorned with flowery language and very pretty images, the metaphorical language is also first-rate. I really enjoyed reading your poem. Thanks for sharing.
Would you midn reading one of my poems "Life Imitates Art"? http://allpoetry.com/poem/2363531 I would appreciate your comments. -
wow it was beautiful...its short and unique (I think thats how you spell it lol) but it was very good keep up the good work
stevie
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sort and sweet. its got good form and structure. i like it.
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A very positive use of energy and harmony in this tiny poem. Powerful and meaningful! The water of life nurturing subconsciously like the waters of the womb.. balance and harmony in spiritual and physical integration. Strong in guidance Meditation. #14 Temperance Love and regards. xx
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Thanx so much for your constructive comment on my work!
I am glad you enjoyed the work.
Thinking #19 The Sun!
Blessings always,
Sophie.
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