Down Penny Lane across the road there is a barber shop
And on the walls are pictures taken of his skills
His customers are few and plenty, even still
They'll step inside with a little time to kill
Just near the bus-stop is a banker riding in a car
While little children make finger gestures when he drives by
He doesn't see them or even understands just why
It's another day closer to the day he dies
It's just another view that fills up my mind
Another place in another time
I sit and wonder but then time flies
While back in Penny Lane a fireman looks at photographs
Inside his coat he carries pictures of the Queen
He's always polishing his fire engine clean
It's so red with such a gleam...
It's just another view so full of sight and sound
At the Bird and Bee you can eat for just a crown
And tuppence down, while back
In Penny Lane down on the corner is a flower girl
Selling her poppies as a treat for all to see
And yet she can't see the forest for the trees
It's another day
While the barber is still cutting hair he wonders why
The banker sits waiting for chance to chat and fly
The fireman stands to smart attention to let him by
I still wonder why
It's just another view that fills up my mind
Another place in another time
I sit and wonder but then time flies
It's just another view so full of sight and sound
At the Bird and Bee you can eat for just a crown
In Penny Lane it's only tuppence down...
Author notes
a Beatles tribute loosely based around 'Penny Lane'
A contest entry
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I commented on this but it hasn't gone on as I mentioned this to my husband whoi is a barber and his friend trained with the barber who is in Penny Lane (BIOLLETTI was his name- the one that is mentioned in the song- now Tony Slavins). Great version of this in your brilliant write..keenly observed..loved the reference to the characters they came alive, the fireman and the flowergirl..I have entered too..(not to win) but to share some of what I felt when I visited Johns house...very moving love you to and peace.. Lib x x
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thanks for entering!!!
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It's interesting, but I had a hard time reading it. The rhyme was a bit off which also threw off the flow. It might be better to write it in free verse unless you can get the rhyme spot on...I dunno. Thanks for the entry.
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Interesting piece. I like that you chose a rhyme scheme, though an odd one for sure. I did notice that your flow was off here and there. I do like the meaning, though.
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