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I Thought of You Today

 

I thought of you today

And wished that you would stay

With me, where you belong

But here I sit alone…


I smile for you, you know

And when you’re near I glow

But you don’t seem to see

How happy you make me…


I guard you while you sleep

And dry the tears you weep

And snuggle close to you

When you are feeling blue…


I am your teddy bear

I’m here when you despair

I’m here when you have need

For a true friend indeed…


I thought of you today

And know that I will stay

Where I always belong

With you I’m not alone…

 

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wrote this back in January and kept thinking I would finish it... decided to post and see if it seems finished to you guys...

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  • TerryColvin
    May 18, 2007

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    This is truely fantastic. I read down thru some of the comments where you yourself called this a silly little piece. Silly maybe, but when we lost the act of simplicity in our lives we lost our child like qualities. We need those child like qualities to live a happy life. So silly is a good thing. A very good thing. Dre to be silly and watch life grow. You're a good writer with a good heart. Thank you for your words and your feelings.


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    May 17, 2007
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    Excellant/imaginative

    Very well written indeed. I really liked it just as it is.


  • curioushermit
    May 15, 2007

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    This is nice, simple, effective. I think it could stop after the 4th stanza. Your teddy bear is expressing who he is: a true friend. (Adult? that comment confused me. I think this works best in its simplicity.)


  • Puppydog gold member
    May 14, 2007

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    THIS IS SO SWEET AND CUTE!

    This would make a child happy to read A lovely poem my dear friend.


  • Frozentearz
    May 14, 2007

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    I think it is finished and I think you have brought out the self worth the teddy holds to many,
    a delight of a read and I thank you for sharing with us,
    Love and Light
    Frozentearz


  • apoeticinjustice gold member
    May 13, 2007

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    this piece reminds me of codependency...a very good write, as Robin states, perhaps much deeper than parent/child. Great flow as well. I think you can put away the edit pen, this one's done.
    Rory


    • Molassis
      May 14, 2007
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      I replied to your comment but it seems to have been lost in cyber space somewhere and didn't post...

      The poem is actually a shallow piece, not even as deep as parent/child.. it's just a poem from a teddybear's view while he's left alone as his child owner grows and leaves him lying around... a silly piece really...

      Thanks for the comment...


  • Frogzter gold member
    May 13, 2007

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    Sis... it is finished and it is perfect! This was wonderful! Loved it and your style on this one just blew me away! Awesome! Looks like gold to me! Love you so much! Huggles,

    Frogz~


  • Robin Candor
    May 13, 2007

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    Well at last you posted. I have more to say about your contest in another forum however. I did not see this piece as a child to parent as your recent reviewer claimed. This appeared more to me as a disclosure of something far more adult in its content even though the picture cartoon might be misleading to the reader. I like the write and am glad to see you online again. As I stated I will go into further detail of my misgivings regarding your recent behaviour in another venue. RC

    • Molassis
      May 14, 2007
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      hmmm..."something far more adult in its content"... actually... this was written from a teddybear's view to his child owner?!?! Not really sure how someone could get adult content from it...


  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    May 13, 2007

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    awe, never knew you cared so much.....
    (just kidding Angel)

    This is a very soft write, and one well worth finishing.

    and if you ever need a Teddy, one with a kilt, well, search no more. I'll cuddle up anytime.

    seriously tho', this piece is a cracker, brings out the mother in you, like as if your not talking of a teddy bear, but the actions you show to your children, and how thier actions are given to you.

    well done and thank you for finishing it.

    • Molassis
      May 13, 2007
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      Kilt eh? My, my that could get just a tad kinky eh?

      Heh heh heh...

      thanks for the comment... I never had a 'teddy bear' growing up... and I'm gunna get one I think...

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