You ask me who I am,
I smile, I laugh.
I give you my answer,
with my hidden mask.
You watch me, and stare,
trying to see inside.
I give you my illusion,
my fake hope.
My soul cries out,
silenced too soon.
My heart, my mind,
wishes to relese the hope,
too soon dashed upon the rocks.
you look at me, watch my mask,
Search for the crack that no one has found.
You want to see a human,
I give you my illusion,
can you find,
who I am?
My soul cries out,
silenced too soon.
My heart, my mind,
wishes to relese the hope,
too soon dashed upon the rocks.
You begg me to tell,
to show you inside,
finnally I give,
too weak to hide.
You soon wish you hadn't.
I hide for that reason,
A tormented soul has no place in my life.
My soul cries out,
silenced too soon.
My heart, my mind,
wishes to relese the hope,
too soon dashed upon the rocks.
I'll walk away,
too cold and harsh,
not the illusion that you so often see.
What did you expect?
That fake thing?
My mask?
Next time,
think some...
then ask.
Author notes
You asked for whats inside... sometimes its better not to know eh? I know I'm dark and depressing but it makes for good poetry.
A contest entry
- Did deep into your honesty and find YOU by Janice M Pickett.
450 points, ended May 14, 2007, 11 entries
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static and distubed. thanks for commenting. I know you always do but sometimes it seems that you must pull teeth to get a comment, oh and thanks to janice and laura...
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Ohhhh
I can relate entirely to this one. Sometimes this feeling makes me feel so alone and isolated I think I'm going insane too. Sometimes the outside of a person can be so different to what's going on in their head, their heart, their mind, their soul. It's a painful thing, and it sort of makes me feel like I stick out like a sore thumb. It is good that you've accepted it at least, and thus you will be more able to link your soul and your exterior. I think we all have our dark side - just most people, like you, don't show it.
Another inspirational write.
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you know sometimes some pple need to see what is hidden behind the mask in order to truly understand why you wear it, i like this pome it is good poetry, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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Thanks for entering
What I see is someone who has been hurt. Someone too afraid to expose themselves because they fear being trampled and hurt all over again. When no-one knows the truth, no-one can throw it in your face when they are angry or trying to get at you in some way. Thats what I see.
What a great way you explained yourself. It takes courage to do this and in fact do the very thing you are scared of.Expose the inner you. People like me can read into your words far more than actions alone show. You showed me someone wonderufl who needs to heal from past pain.
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Thanks janice though I'd have tp say that laura did a better job of explaining me... I hope you enjoyed my poem...
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I think that the "inside" you describe is yet another mask & I think you wear it in order to push others away so that you guarantee the only pain you feel is the pain of isolation that you punish yourself with.
The repetition worls well to give power to this piece. There are quite a few typo's that spellcheck can render, but otherwise this is quite the thought-provoking piece.
Thanks for sharing.
La x
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Thanx... I think... If you wish to see me that way than yea! i guess... but yea... This poem is my best and I'm glade that you and janice M picket commented... It makes me feel loved!!!
~Shadows~
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