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Heavenly Bliss



Heavenly Bliss

Laying here
in my bed
I am lost in my thoughts

A soft sensuous voice
still echoes within me
her whisper danced
upon a gentle breeze
taking me to a paradise
I have never known

Even now
it calls to me
in ways words
just cannot describe

I have searched
the vast mountains
that once surrounded me

I have even crossed
the hot desert sand
in hopes of finding
this voice that touched my soul
with her tenderness

Now as I lay here
thinking of how
this voice still embraces
my heart and soul

You whisper my name
and slowly walk to me
my heart tingles with your magic
it reaches into the essence of my soul

I turn
I’m in awe
as it was you all along

Our eyes meet
for the first time

You caress my cheeks
holding them within your gentle hands
guiding my lips to yours

Our lips meet
in the magic of a kiss

You caress my cheeks
with the tenderness
of your hands
and your lips

I fall deeper
in love with you

My heart and soul
reaches out with
the eternal love
meant only for you

As the sun starts to set
the sky turns to gold
our souls join
as we cuddle
in this heavenly bliss

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By the way, It is I The humble but passionate knight, Ed

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  • PassionsPromise gold member
    May 29, 2007
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    a wonderful piece penned here. Thanks for sharing and best of luck to you.
    V~


  • coffeeangel316
    May 28, 2007
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    This is a very good write. I enjoyed reading it. You are so sweet and passionate. Keep penning.


  • Hinemoa silver member
    May 28, 2007

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    Dear Ed,
    Hi my friend I love the sensual words you have written. You are such a romantic guy just like my Heath is, he makes my toes curl just like you do.
    Whoever it's written for is some lucky Sheila.
    beautiful.
    Hine


  • soulfultia gold member
    May 21, 2007

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    This was very good, a sensual write with a soft flow and soft impact as I read. You seem to be able to capture an essence of love and lust within the lines, tastefully done I might add. Very good work, My pleasure to read ~Tia


  • Lily of the Valley
    May 15, 2007

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    As usual, I'm always late to arrive on your doorstep but when I do it's well worth the visit. Somehow the content of your poetry doesn't seem important though, it's consistently pleasing. What is more important is there's something of your heart and soul in each and every poem you write and this one is an offering that showcases that so clearly. The art of seduction is within you. Any one that knows you will know that as the truth.

    I wish you well in the contest.


  • Papers
    May 14, 2007

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    Wow, I could just hear your heart in each of these words as they were read. Such an excellent way to say how much you love this person, very great write! Keep up the great work!


  • Lady Ireland gold member
    May 14, 2007

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    Hi Ed,
    Good to see you back again.
    well i think your in love...this is soppyness at its best, nothing wrong with it eiter!
    You have a lot of repetitions in it but i guess you needed to say i love you all those times.
    what ever it is that makes you wirte with your heart then its all good.
    good luck Romeo!
    Slán Dolores xx


  • MercyMe
    May 14, 2007

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    Love

    Is my pal in love?....these words are beautifully penned with an open heart...at least it seems that way to me..


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    May 14, 2007

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    you know this is like a message too, like how you cna seach and look for something that has been right by you all along, i like this pome, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • Frozentearz
    May 14, 2007

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    Some beautiful words written across this page,
    very warm and loving, sigh a blessing to read,
    thanks for sharing,
    Warm thoughts
    Frozentearz


  • Angel by Moonlight
    May 13, 2007

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    This is a very beautiful poem and I think that you captured your love very well. As I read this it made me think of my love and it made me realize how lucky I am as well. Who ever you wrote this poem for is very lucky, I wish you both the best.~Angel


  • Nature Song silver member
    May 13, 2007

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    'As the sun starts to set
    the sky turns to gold
    our souls join
    as we cuddle
    in this heavenly bliss'

    Simply lovely...sensous soft whispers of love throughout the whole poem! Amazing write! ~Sie


  • Je Suis Prete
    May 13, 2007

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    Hmmm...I must say this isn't the best you've written. I can feel the love you have for this person, but in all honesty, and it's just my opinion, it's mediocre. The slight repetition in places kinda knocked it down for me. Your love and caring is very evident in this piece but it doesn't radiate out like usual. I am happy to see something new from you though and I look forward to reading more. To sum things up: I give this piece a B.
    Sara


  • Bazza
    May 13, 2007

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    Heady stuff.

    I get the impression that you ar in love !!! how many times can you say it before we believe it ?? lol joking aside this was a sincere and loving tender poem that filled me with warmth and longings for more of the same thing. A testimony of your love almost written in blood it seems from its' depth. Well done.


  • Melodies
    May 13, 2007

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    Smiling...

    This is a poem that deserves a hug and a pat on the back! Really lovely thoughts, so filled with beautiful affection.


  • imperfectperfection
    May 13, 2007

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    Magnificent

    Absolutely beautiful wings of words of your poetry that take a flight right into the heights of reader's heart & depth of their soul cleansing the spirits of love... yes you are back YAY!!! as always, you have laid the simple words tenderly to form a sensually pure poetry that has flies with dove wings of hope of true love to come in one's life when the soulmate touches one's heart beyond all teh barriers... good luck in the contest, but to me this is an absolute winner


  • Immortal Obscurity Greeters member
    May 13, 2007
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    Awwwww! Whomever this person is, he or she is very lucky indeed! You have captured the beauty of love at it's best, and the beautiful sensuality of it all, but without the trashiness. Very well done, and I hope that both of you will stay so happy.

    All the best,

    Laura


  • Jadeheart 41
    May 13, 2007

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    I am in awe once again at your loving heart and soul! this is just the best I have seen from you yet and I am sure this special soul feels your pure heart and appreciates this and will treasure it always!


  • JoyfulWriter
    May 13, 2007

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    This speaks of so much love as these words whispered across the page and they find there mark within her soul...this is so beautiful...these words that come form your heart casts such wondrous expectations and gives love a whole new meaning...good luck in this contest...smiles, Terry


  • Sandygram silver member
    May 13, 2007

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    So Beautiful!!!!

    Wow Ed, You have penned a lovely and romantic poem so full of sweet seduction. The softness of your words will melt the heart of who ever reads it. Your loving words echo throughout the poem. This brings many smiles. She is a very lucky lady whoever she is. I am sure you are in her thoughts too. You take care my friend. Sandy


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    May 13, 2007

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    A totally beautiful and very sweet write! Sigh...
    I love this!
    This just reaches out and touches the heart and soul of your reader
    All the best to you!

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