She says hello to her dirty little secret
And embraces it with her crayola smile
Shoves it down her raw and sore throat
And up comes the gift wrapped surprise
Bulimia
I have to tell you crayola face
That drawn expression
&& Clothes that are falling off you
Let me in on your little secret
Collapsing
Falling hard and hitting the ground
After each in and out of the magic stick
She’s pumping her own stomach
Work it ((Work it)) stick figure
Breathing
Heave heave heave little stick girl
Retch your heart out ‘cause it suits you
But you need to know that gagging noise
Can be heard from miles away…
Discovered
She’s waving goodbye to her little secret
That drawn expression && dopey eyed look
The swollen neck and rough voice
Sickly breath and gagging noises
Gave your game away.
Author notes
Option 3
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A contest entry
- i want dirty pretty by Aquamarine..
700 points, ended May 16, 2007, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Honorable mention
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i dont know whatto say
awesomness
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Very very nice... Bulemia sucks horribly... I've been suffering from it for about 5 or 6 years and it is hell... This describes it very well. I give you props for that!
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This write is straight to the point,I like that. It also made me more aware of the symptoms & signs of eating disorders.Great write.
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great poem.
A very close friend of mine suffers from bulimia. Usually, she tells me everything but I was the last to know about her eating disorder. There is this element of shame and secrecy about it that you managed to portry in your poem. So sad that people cannot love themselves.
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I will never understand this act.
It always seems too, that it is the prettiest of girls that do this, lol, makes me feel even more uglier and inferior myself
Your write reminds me oftalking with a friend when she would tell me about this...still feel sad.
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love this. its absolutely fabulous. thanks for entering!
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Lovely imagery,
lovely concept.
Thanks for entering my contest
Goodluck bbydoll--
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wow
i love this. your imagery is fantastic, the words you chose are strong. i loved every line of this.
Falling hard and hitting the ground
After each in and out of the magic stick
She’s pumping her own stomach
Work it ((Work it)) stick figure
^^^^^ my favorite lines.
thankyou so much for entering this, its lovely.
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This is wonderful, I like the use of single words in between each stanza. Well done & good luck in my contest.
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Beautifully Written. THis portrays all of the correct emotions that I want it to. Thanks for sharing. love and Peace, Charlene.
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dont mind.
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bravo
Harsh, hard and nasty, but poetically well and ably done through...bravo...bravo ...bravo...
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Whoaa, this kind of caught me off-guard haha.
"She says hello to her dirty little secret
And embraces it with her crayola smile
Shoves it down her raw and sore throat
And up comes the gift wrapped surprise"
"Heave heave heave little stick girl
Retch your heart out ‘cause it suits you
But you need to know that gagging noise
Can be heard from miles away…"
This is really good!!
I can relate, so that helps.
You've portrayed this in a way that I don't think I've ever quite seen before. It's raw and brutally honest to the point that its sickening (ironic, no?). I love it, great job! Thank you for entering and good luck♥
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OMG! I love this write. It's so amazing. colour me intrigued!
I'm gonna go read some more of your work -
very cool piece..it's nice when ppl shed light on subjects like this because thousands of girls do this to themselves & you don't always know...great write. luck in the contest
xoxo,
lys
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Awwwwwww
this is saaaaaaad
in a scarey way
but its good!
woah im not good with words lol
but i really bajreally like like like it!
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wow yours is the best ive read all day you have a really good chance of winning i love your poem good luck in my contest
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