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suicidal embrace

In the mind of desperation,
She tries to end her misery.

But in the end
He reaches out and catches her.

He seen how much beauty that is held within,
But for the sanity of herself she could not see.

When he reached out to embrace her loveliness
she passed with remorse and fell into his arms.


If she only knew that he was there,
And how much he truly cared.

He was always there to embrace whatever came her way,
To help her in the best way he knew how.

And now, as she dies with the thoughts of such loleness.
He embraces her one last time.

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  • pvenugopal
    July 1, 2007
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    Nice free-flowing write, simple and unsophisticated. I liked this poem.


  • serenity silvermoon
    June 16, 2007
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    this was a good but sad poem thanks for sharing

  • Napoet
    May 27, 2007

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    Well written

    I felt this was a dark poem. Sad, yet well written. It made me question why he could not see her pain and save her before that last fateful moment, but it seems that was the point. Great write.


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    May 19, 2007

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    The concept behind this write seems to be about a ghost? Or spirit? Or an Angel watching over her? I like that. Thanks for this entry and good luck.

    Jeannie


  • Storm-Goddess
    May 14, 2007

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    ok not my favorite poem but really good ,it flowed well ,really descriptive i felt like it was me . very good write sis


  • RedTalon
    May 14, 2007

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    Good...

    Hot darn, this is smoking...except for those few typos--those dag-blasted vermin. Good. REALLY GOOD. I loved how you took hold of the picture and captured it with such a brilliant word choice. EXQUISITE!!! Good luck in my contest. I hope you had fun with this entry.

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