Slurred speech and misconcepted vision, I was sober once upon a time
Trying to remember the drink's that iv'e drank whilst up the stairs I climb.
Running away from my continual worries by downing a vodka or two
The numb feeling inside my head, tells me it was the right thing to do
A regular trip to the local shop,becomes a well-deserved treat
An evening alone, with an empty bottle,I daily break down in defeat
Denying every problem, to friends and people all around
Who knows if one-day i'll drink to much and end up on the ground
It's easier said than done, to finally admit that you have failed
To tell the ones you love, that your life has completely derailed
Please tell me what you think
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Emotional
There's a few problems with rhythm, but overall a powerful poem. Easy to understand.
It's hard to admit defeat by an addiction, I still haven't faced it completely. Telling the ones you love is the hardest part, I haven't because I'm worried they'll be disappointed which will send me even deeper into this pool of "slurred speech and misconcepted vision. If this is a problem for you, I wish you the best of luck.
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I loved it!
It is the same for me, exept, I cut.
GOOD-JOB!
=P
[FROSH]
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marvilous
wow, this is really good.i love the theme about how you drink you problems away. i can relate, but for me, though i pefer drinks, its easier to get the smokes, so i smoke my problems away. very well written and love the poem, keep it up -
really good
story of my life. I love the last two lines, sums it all up.
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thankyou very much, it's always lovely 2 hear comments, even thoguh it's about something negative. thanks
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