look at all the people
walking past one by one
in their bright light
they stare at you
casting a shadow of rejection
they tell you
you'll never be one with them
they say you can't join in on the crowd
self-pity is all they want from you
just so they can sit back and laugh
at your rejection
but why does it matter to them
the students and teachers at school?
the co-workers and bosses you've known
for so long
who don't even remember your name?
look at the freak as she
walks past the table
mock her however you will
because she knows all to well
that acceptance from you
would be far worse than simple
rejection
Author notes
this isn't exactly my best work (in fact far from it), but i'm pretty happy with it. Please be as brutally honest as you want to be, i promise i won't be offended.
A contest entry
- here's to the losers II by risewiththesmoke.
300 points, ended June 7, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Wonderful
Wonderful expressions, really captures the essence of the contest theme. Good luck in the contest.
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Wow, I really like this, especially the last few lines. An odd contradiction, but certainly a very thought-provoking one. The word choice is very good as well. You have true talent, so you really do need to start writing down whatever poems you think of! =)
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well it fits you Manda and you being one handed I'll just say....you ever see these: . , ? ! ???? huh lol oh well its really honest and I agree.
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this really struck a chord in me. a very touching write. i love the reinforcement of the concept of "rejection" in the repetition of the word, each time it seems like it's hitting you hard as you read it. thank you so much for entering.
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it is a good poem
the only thing i spot is here - all to well - where to should have an extra o all too well.
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